過年了

●春節(jié)即將來臨，請(qǐng)給你在美國(guó)的筆友寫一封信，談?wù)摯藭r(shí)此刻你和家人是如何為春節(jié)做準(zhǔn)備的。要求：①寫出本人的真情實(shí)感。②80~100詞左右。

Dear Arnold,

How is life?

Im so excited at the moment because the Spring Festival is coming. That is a tradition day for the Chinese people get together. Its Chinas New Years Day. And now my family is geting ready for it!

My grandfather is making paper cuts and decorate the doors and windows with paper cuts. My grandma is sweeping the floor and clean the room. I know she wants to sweep away bad luck. What am I doing? I am making some little lanterns and color them now. And Im thinking about writing and sending some postcards and e-mails to my good friends.

Oh,What smells delicious! Yes, my mother is cooking the meal for New Year' Eve. She is singing and cooking. “My family will get together eating, talking and watching TV. Im enjoying everything!”How funny my mother is!

Tell me about a festival in your country.

Best wishes，

Love from,

Kan Hongrui

點(diǎn)評(píng)：首先， How is life 這句話用得不夠地道，作者原意是想說一句問候語(yǔ)，詢問對(duì)方過得怎么樣，更為常用、地道的句子應(yīng)該是 How is everything going; tradition意為“傳統(tǒng)”，這里修飾后面的名詞day，應(yīng)用形容詞形式traditional；作者想表達(dá)“那是中國(guó)人團(tuán)聚的傳統(tǒng)日子”，但在本句中，已經(jīng)有了一個(gè)動(dòng)詞做謂語(yǔ)，如果再有其他動(dòng)詞就要使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，所以這里的get 要用其不定式形式to get 來表達(dá)；family 這個(gè)詞要注意，它在此處應(yīng)為“家里人”的意思，而不是“家庭”的意思，所以它此時(shí)是一個(gè)集體名詞，本身具有復(fù)數(shù)概念，所以be動(dòng)詞要用復(fù)數(shù)形式，另外，get 的現(xiàn)在分詞形式應(yīng)該雙寫t加ing；當(dāng)由and來連接兩個(gè)并列動(dòng)詞時(shí)，這兩個(gè)動(dòng)詞在時(shí)態(tài)和形式上要一致，如信中的make和decorate，sweep 和clean，make 和color。She is singing and cooking這一句，作者想表達(dá)“媽媽準(zhǔn)備春節(jié)大餐時(shí)，一邊做飯一邊唱歌”的喜悅心情，但是這個(gè)句子卻并沒有表達(dá)出這樣的意思，那么，“一邊……一邊……”該如何表達(dá)呢？我們可以運(yùn)用連詞as 來表達(dá)：She is singing happily as she is cooking；最后，作者想寫媽媽是個(gè)很有趣的人，用了funny 這個(gè)詞，不夠恰當(dāng)，因?yàn)閒unny這個(gè)詞的意思是“逗人發(fā)笑，行為滑稽可笑”，而“有趣的，令人愉快的”應(yīng)該用形容詞fun，此處的感嘆句用得就不錯(cuò)，給文章增色不少。

修改后的作文：

Dear Arnold,

How is everything going?

Im so excited at the moment because the Spring Festival is coming. That is a traditional day for the Chinese people to get together. Its Chinas New Years Day. And now my family are getting ready for it!

My grandfather is making paper cuts and decorating the doors and windows with paper cuts. My grandma is sweeping the floor and cleaning the room. I know she wants to sweep away bad luck. What am I doing? I am making some little lanterns and coloring them now. And Im thinking about writing and sending some postcards and e-mails to my good friends.

Oh, What smells delicious! Yes, my mother is cooking the meal for New Year Eve. She is singing happily as she is cooking. “My family will get together eating, talking and watching TV. Im enjoying everything!” How fun my mother is!

Tell me about a festival in your country.

Best wishes，

Love from,

Kan Hongrui