五句話作文的句子整合技巧

高考英語基礎(chǔ)寫作主要考查考生運(yùn)用語言結(jié)構(gòu)和基本句型，對(duì)表達(dá)內(nèi)容進(jìn)行加工、整合的能力。考生如果沒有一定的語言駕馭技巧，要用五句話完整地表達(dá)眾多繁雜的內(nèi)容也絕非一件容易的事。下面以2011年廣州一模的基礎(chǔ)寫作為例來談?wù)劸渥拥恼霞记伞?/p>

原題：學(xué)校英語論壇針對(duì)目前城市交通擁堵、污染嚴(yán)重的問題進(jìn)行了“治堵方案大家談”的討論。以下是討論概要。

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請(qǐng)根據(jù)以上概要寫一篇短文，包括以下內(nèi)容：

1.存在的問題；

2.解決的方案；

3.方案的好處。

經(jīng)過簡單的審題，我們可以列出以下十多個(gè)松散的信息點(diǎn)：

①We had a discussion.

②Our streets are crowded with traffic./There are too many private cars.

③The air is seriously polluted.

④Some solutions are put forward./Everyone is encouraged to offer suggestions.

⑤Car owners could reduce the use of private cars.

⑥They could share their cars with their friends and workmates.

⑦The government should do something to improve the public transport system.

⑧The government should build more green lanes.

⑨The public transport system should be more convenient for citizens.

⑩People should be encouraged to use their bicycles.

Money， time and energy will be saved.

The measures are friendly to the environment.

其中，①-③涉及存在的問題，④-⑩表達(dá)解決的方案，最后兩點(diǎn)是方案的好處。接下來，我們來運(yùn)用自己的語言知識(shí)，將相關(guān)的信息點(diǎn)整合起來。

一、運(yùn)用短語來整合信息

1. 運(yùn)用名詞短語。

Increasing numbers of private cars contribute to heavy traffic jams and serious air pollution.(名詞短語，整合信息點(diǎn)②③)

2. 運(yùn)用介詞短語。

People are more aware of the fact that increasing number of private cars has given rise to serious problems like traffic jams and air pollution. (介詞短語充當(dāng)定語，整合信息點(diǎn)②③)

3. 運(yùn)用非謂語短語。

The government should improve the public transport system to make it more convenient for people.(動(dòng)詞不定式短語，整合信息點(diǎn)⑦⑧⑨)

Building more green lanes is obviously a good way to encourage cycling instead of driving. (動(dòng)名詞短語作主語和動(dòng)詞不定式短語作定語，整合信息點(diǎn)⑤⑧⑩)

There is a widespread concern over environmental pollution and traffic jams caused by private cars. (過去分詞短語作定語，整合信息點(diǎn)②③)

First， car owners could share their cars with their friends and workmates， thus reducing the use of private cars. (現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語，整合信息點(diǎn)⑤⑥)

4. 運(yùn)用with的復(fù)合賓語結(jié)構(gòu)或獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)。

Hopefully， with people sharing private cars with each other， our city will definitely be an environment-friendly place to live in.(with的復(fù)合賓語結(jié)構(gòu)，整合信息點(diǎn)⑥)

5. 運(yùn)用詞語搭配。

Meanwhile， it is our belief that our government has a role to play in improving the transport system by building more green lanes and encouraging cycling. (動(dòng)詞搭配play a role in的變體，合并信息點(diǎn)⑦⑧⑩)

We held a discussion in the hope of coming up with some practical solutions to end the shameful condition of traffic jams and air pollution in our city. (動(dòng)詞搭配in the hope of doing...，合并信息點(diǎn)②③④)

二、利用并列結(jié)構(gòu)來整合信息

寫作中，我們常用and， but， not only..but also...， neither...nor...， either...or...， for， while， as well as等并列結(jié)構(gòu)來合并兩個(gè)或者更多的相關(guān)信息。

These measures can not only help save money， time and energy， but also improve the environment. (并列謂語，合并信息點(diǎn))

三、利用復(fù)合句來整合信息

復(fù)合句可以整合眾多相關(guān)信息，同時(shí)也是語言功底的表現(xiàn)。

1. 運(yùn)用名詞性從句。

When it comes to traffic jams and air pollution， some people come up with the idea that car owners could reduce the use of private cars by sharing cars with their friends and workmates. (運(yùn)用同位語從句，整合信息點(diǎn)⑤⑥)

2. 運(yùn)用定語從句。

With the development of economy， more and more people have their own cars， which in turn leads to such problems as traffic jams and air pollution. (運(yùn)用定語從句，整合信息點(diǎn)②③)

3. 運(yùn)用狀語從句。

If the government could improve the public transport system， it would be more convenient for people to travel. (運(yùn)用條件狀語從句，整合信息點(diǎn)⑦)

當(dāng)然，在實(shí)際寫作中，我們要靈活、綜合運(yùn)用，使句子長短有致，簡潔明了，同時(shí)使用關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使句與句之間更連貫流暢。我們可以將以上內(nèi)容整合成五句話：

Recently， the issue of traffic jams and air pollution caused by private cars has been brought to the concern of all people， especially us students， who came up with some practical suggestions in a discussion. (信息點(diǎn)①-④) In our opinion， citizens could reduce the use of private cars by sharing with their friends and workmates. (信息點(diǎn)⑤⑥) Besides， what really matters is that the government improves the public transport system to make it more convenient for people to travel.(信息點(diǎn)⑦⑨) Meanwhile， the government should have more green lanes built to encourage cycling. (信息點(diǎn)⑧⑩) By taking the above measures， not only can we save money， time and energy but also we can contribute to a city with better environment. （信息點(diǎn)）

(作者單位：佛山市順德區(qū)勒流中學(xué))

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