江西 江海連
?情境呈現
假定你的老師讓你在班級分享自己的健康報告,請你按以下要點寫一篇80詞左右的文章。 內容包括:
1. 過去——身體虛弱,經常感冒;2. 現在——養成早起鍛煉的好習慣,悅納自己;3. 結果及感想。
?寫作指導
Step 1 文體感知
學生可以在健康報告中交流關于健康生活的心得體會。 寫作時,可以從“鍛煉(exercise)、減壓(reduce stress)、自信(self-confidence)及健康飲食(healthy eating)”等方面入手,也可以從自己或他人的過去與現在的對比入手。 總之,寫健康報告的目的就是喚醒他人或自己對健康的認知,從而建立起健康的生活模式。
Step 2 謀篇布局

體裁 健康報告人稱 第一人稱時態 一般過去時和一般現在時布局Para. 1:過去的健康狀況Para. 2:現在的健康狀況及做法Para. 3:結果及感想
Step 3 語言組織
詞塊積累
healthy/fit 健康的
unhealthy/unfit 不健康的
green food 綠色食品
healthy diet 健康飲食
good living habits 好的生活習慣
overweight 肥胖
lose weight 減重
enough sleep 充足的睡眠
build up oneself 強身健體
go on a diet 節食
form a healthy eating habit 養成一個健康的飲食習慣
be in poor health 不健康
be good for one's health 對某人的健康有益
句子積累
1. I'd like to share my ideas involving how to keep healthy physically and mentally.我想分享一下我關于如何保持身心健康的想法。
2. We are doing sports to keep healthy. 我們進行體育運動是為了保持健康。
3. I worried about my weight and tried every new diet I read about online. 我擔心自己的體重,并嘗試了我在網上讀到的每一種新的飲食方法。
4. I almost went bananas. 我快要發瘋了。
5. Once I started thinking about health rather than weight, things began to change.一旦我開始考慮健康問題而不是體重問題,事情就開始改變了。
6. Rather than cutting out the foods I enjoyed, I added healthy foods to my meals.我并沒有減少我喜歡的食物,而是在我的食物中添加了健康的食物。
7. Taking exercise does make a difference! 鍛煉確實會有很大的作用!
8. I want to be able to do 30 push-ups every day. 我想每天都能做30個俯臥撐。
9. Stop comparing yourself with actresses and models. 不要再把自己與女演員和模特做比較了。
10. By being positive about myself and my body, I became both happier and healthier. 通過悅納自己和自己的身體,我變得更快樂、更健康。
過渡語
as a result 結果
instead 反而
however 然而
after that 在那之后
what's more 而且
then 然后
now 現在
?佳作欣賞
When I was young, I was so weak that I caught a cold now and then. As a result, it was difficult for me to go to school like other children.
Then I read an article that said jogging in the morning would make a difference to health. In order to change myself, I follow the advice and do it every day. After that, I form the habit of getting up early and jogging for half an hour. What's more, I am more positive about myself and my body.
Now, my body is building up by working out every day, which is good for my daily life.
?即時訓練
你所在的班級即將舉行健康報告分享活動,請根據以下要點寫一篇80詞左右的文章。
1. 以前:吃垃圾食品,不鍛煉;
2. 現在:平衡膳食,堅持鍛煉;
3. 你的體會。
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