恩師在側(cè)，時光如蜜

廣東 程志麗

深受家庭困擾，“我”的成績一落千丈。 班主任賈斯廷夫人關(guān)注到“我”的變化，并從此走進(jìn)“我”的生活……

1It was a most difficult period. Things at home were getting from bad to worse. Dad became frustrated and more silent, especially after he was told that he couldn't continue working. Mum was always temperamental (喜怒無常的) as she could not make ends meet with her low income as a factory operator. I had been an above-average student, but now I was doing poorly in school.

2I was very afraid of coming home after school.Dad would come home late and went straight into his room, refusing to communicate with Mum and I. When he fell asleep, I would often hear Mum's repeated helpless sighs. I could do nothing to ease the depressing situation at home and this realization caused me a great deal of pain and frustration.

3It was at this point that Mrs Justin entered my life. A soft-spoken woman in her late forties, she was my class teacher. As alert as she was, she quickly noticed the change that had come over me. One day, during break, I was standing alone in one corner of the canteen when Mrs Justin spotted me. She gestured for me to follow her. We headed for the library where she signaled me to take a seat next to her. I sat with my head bent. “Helen,” she called. I lifted my head and looked at her. I saw the warmth, the love, and the compassion in her lovely eyes. Tears welled up in my eyes and I tried my best to hold them back. However, I could not. They started flowing down my cheeks. She held my hands and waited. When I had finished,she asked me if I wanted to tell her my problem. I told her. She listened in concentration with the patience of a saint. At the end of my story, she gave me a lesson on life and its ups and downs. As I heard her talk, my admiration for this woman grew. Something in me changed. Before this meeting, I had felt I was a failure. However, as the meeting progressed, I felt different. I knew Mrs Justin cared about me.

Reading Check

閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1:

In the days that followed, Mrs Justin helped me a lot.________________________

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Paragraph 2:

After the exam, Mrs Justin announced that I was the top student in the class._____

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寫作導(dǎo)引

一、語篇研讀

（一）基本要素

Who I, once an 1. ___________student but now doing 2. ____________in school;Mrs Justin, my class teacher, a 3. ____________and 4. ___________woman in her late forties;Dad, out of work, frustrated and more silent;Mum, earning a low income, always temperamental and sighing at night.When In a most 5. ____________period for me Where 6.____________What 7. ____________days with my teacher beside Why Because Mrs Justin 8. ____________me and helped me a lot and I got improved and learned a lot from her.

（二）主題探索

What is the text about? And what does the author want to tell us through her experience?

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二、語言學(xué)習(xí)

（一）詞塊

Expressions Chinese meaning 1. make ends meet 2. an above-average student 3. do poorly in 4. cause sb a great deal of pain and frustration 5. spot sb 6. gesture for sb to do/signal sb to do 7. head for/to 8. sit with one's head bent 9. lift one's head and look at sb 10. Tears welled up in my eyes and I tried my best to hold them back.11. Tears started flowing down my cheeks.12. listen in concentration with the patience of a saint 13. give sb a lesson on 14. care about

（二）句式

1. 狀語從句

Dad became frustrated and more silent, especially after he was told that he couldn't continue working. (Para. 1)

爸爸變得很沮喪，也更加沉默寡言了，尤其是在他被告知不能繼續(xù)工作之后。

Mum was always temperamental as she could not make ends meet with her low income as a factory operator. (Para. 1)

媽媽總是喜怒無常，因為她作為工廠技工，收入很低，無法維持生計。

When he fell asleep, I would often hear Mum's repeated helpless sighs. (Para. 2)

當(dāng)他睡著時，我經(jīng)常聽到媽媽反復(fù)發(fā)出無奈的嘆息。

I was standing alone in one corner of the canteen when Mrs Justin spotted me.(Para.3)

當(dāng)賈斯廷夫人發(fā)現(xiàn)我時，我正獨(dú)自站在食堂的一個角落。

As I heard her talk, my admiration for this woman grew. (Para. 3)

當(dāng)我聽她說話時，我越來越欽佩這個女人。

However, as the meeting progressed, I felt different. (Para. 3)

然而，隨著這次會面的進(jìn)行，我的感覺有所不同。

2. 定語從句

As alert as she was,she quickly noticed the change that had come over me.(Para.3)

警覺如她，她很快就注意到了我身上發(fā)生的變化。

We headed for the library where she signaled me to take a seat next to her. (Para. 3)

我們前往圖書館，她示意我在她旁邊坐下。

3. 強(qiáng)調(diào)句型

It was at this point that Mrs Justin entered my life. (Para. 3)

正是在這時候，賈斯廷夫人進(jìn)入了我的生活。

4. and連接幾個連續(xù)的動作動詞

I lifted my head and looked at her. (Para. 3)

我抬起頭看著她。

Tears welled up in my eyes and I tried my best to hold them back. (Para. 3)

淚水涌上眼眶，我盡力忍住。

She held my hands and waited. (Para. 3)

她握著我的手等待著。

（三）即學(xué)即用

1. 隨著時間的推移，約翰先生看起來更開朗了。 （使用狀語從句）

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2. 我媽媽會把我們能剩下的任何食物帶給我們的新朋友。 (使用定語從句)

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3. 正是在這個關(guān)鍵時刻，我想到了一個好主意。 (使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句型)

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4. 女孩停止哭泣，往后退了退，然后開始唱歌。 (and連接連續(xù)的動作動詞)

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三、續(xù)寫技能

（一）表達(dá)“幸福/高興”的短語

(對……)感到幸福/高興 be/feel happy/glad/pleased/delighted/joyful/overjoyed/exhilarated...feel a surge of happiness/delight/joy喜出望外/欣喜若狂 (be) overcome/overwhelmed/consumed/wild with happiness/delight/joy對……笑 smile/grin/beam at sb幸福/高興地 with (great) happiness/joy/delight幸福/高興(通過動作體現(xiàn))jump with joy; beam with pleasure; wear a broad/shining/bright smile(on sb's face); roar with laughter; dance with joy and happiness wag its tail furiously; leap into sb's arms and lick sb's face

（二）表達(dá)“幸福/高興”的句子

翻譯：我很幸福/高興。

方法一：增加細(xì)節(jié)描寫，注意邏輯關(guān)系以及語意的合理。

1. 高興極了，他們緊緊地抱住對方。

Overwhelmed with joy, they held each other tightly.

So joyful did they feel that they held each other tightly.

2. 她對我咧嘴一笑，眼睛里閃爍著喜悅和幸福。

She grinned at me, her eyes twinkling with joy and happiness.

方法二：使用修辭手法，使表達(dá)更生動形象。

3. 她臉上的笑容像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光。 （比喻）

The smile on her face shone like a diamond.

4. 聽到這個好消息，一股幸福感突然向她襲來。 (擬人)

Hearing the good news, a sudden surge of happiness took hold of her.

5. 人們對于幸福的感受在許多方面都有所不同。 (夸張)

People's feelings of happiness are differnt in a thousand and one ways.

四、續(xù)寫布局

文章最后一段末尾，“我”知道了賈斯廷夫人關(guān)心我，“我”有了與以往不同的感受。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段的段首句“接下來的日子里，賈斯廷夫人幫助了我很多”和續(xù)寫第二段的段首句“考試結(jié)束后，賈斯廷夫人宣布我是班上的尖子生”可推測，續(xù)寫第一段的內(nèi)容應(yīng)圍繞賈斯廷夫人給予“我”幫助，以及“我”信心滿滿地迎接考試而展開。 寫作時，可結(jié)合原文對賈斯廷夫人的描述——溫柔、敏感等性格特點(diǎn)推測賈斯廷夫人可能給予的幫助。 具體情節(jié)發(fā)展，可根據(jù)以下問題鏈推測：

1. How did Mrs Justin help me?

2. How did I feel and what would I do?

3. What kind of change would I make?

4. How did I feel about the exam?

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段的段首句“考試結(jié)束后，賈斯廷夫人宣布我是班上的尖子生”和原文提到的賈斯廷夫人教授“我”人生道理可推測，續(xù)寫第二段應(yīng)圍繞“我”“逆襲”成功的喜悅、對賈斯廷夫人的欽佩和感恩，以及賈斯廷夫人對“我”的人生啟迪而展開。具體情節(jié)發(fā)展，可根據(jù)以下問題鏈推測：

1. How did I feel?

2. Did our meeting that day continue? If so, what would Mrs Justin do?

3. What did I learn from Mrs Justin?

4. What did Mrs Justin mean to me?