As we know, it is very important for淤keep healthy. But do you know how tokeep healthy? Here is some advice for you.
First, I think you must have enough food to keep healthy. Second, you shouldkeep yourself clean and tidy. Always wash your hands. Third, keep your windowsopen for one or two hour于every day. So the fresh air can get in your room. Fourth,you should eat more vegetables and fruits, so盂they are good for your health. Finally,try to do some sports every day. I think doing some sports is necessary for you tokeep healthy.
河北省阜城縣第四中學(xué) 沈一凡
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張超男,河北省衡水市阜城縣第四中學(xué)高級英語教師、縣骨干教師、市優(yōu)秀英語教師,從事英語教育教學(xué)工作30 多年;多年來,在省級以上報(bào)刊發(fā)表文章數(shù)百篇,并有多篇文章獲獎;曾參與多本教輔資料的編寫工作;曾榮獲“中央教育科學(xué)研究所全國基礎(chǔ)教育科研先進(jìn)個(gè)人”榮譽(yù)稱號;曾多次輔導(dǎo)多名學(xué)生在市、省和國家級英語競賽中獲獎。
優(yōu)點(diǎn):本文主旨明確,條理清晰。小作者給出了四點(diǎn)不同方面的建議,這些建議符合實(shí)際,操作性和實(shí)用性都很強(qiáng)。總之,這是一篇邏輯明晰、語法正確的學(xué)生范文。
需要修改的地方:
①for 改為to。important 后面加to do something 表示“做某事很重要”。
②hour 改為hours。two 后面的可數(shù)名詞應(yīng)用復(fù)數(shù)形式。
③so 改為because。根據(jù)前文內(nèi)容,這里應(yīng)表原因,所以用because 連接。
評分:按照中考英語作文滿分20 分的標(biāo)準(zhǔn),本文修改前可得18 分。