巧用微技能給讀后續寫增色

何莎

讀后續寫一直是高考的難點，很多考生一直苦惱如何給自己的作文增分添色。下面以2024年深一模讀后續寫為例，給大家提供幾個實用的微技能。

閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

In our weekly staff meeting，our editor Ashley was not pleased with the quality of our reporting.“Our readership is way down.We need better stories for this Thursdays school newspaper.Does anybody have any ideas？”she said.

I handed her my article about our basketball team beating Deerfield High School the previous night by one point.“Sports stories are fun，”she said，“but not good enough for the front page.We need something to really get peoples attention.”

After our meeting，we left the newsroom together and heard someone screaming.“Perry is missing！”Perry was a big red parrot and had been our school mascot for ten years.He played an important role in students'lives，both in and out of class.He had also been a constant presence at school events，inspiring a sense of unity among students.

Everyone gathered around Perrys empty cage，heartbroken.Suddenly，a student from the crowd came over and showed me a photo.“Youre a reporter for the school paper，right？ I happened to take this yesterday，”he said.In the photo was a Deerfield High School basketball player with something large hidden under his shirt around the size of a parrot.

“He must have stolen Perry to get back at us for winning the game！”Ashley cried.We hurried back to the newsroom，agreeing to run the photo on the front page with the headline “Deerfield Stole Perry.”“This is just the story we need.Everyone will read it，”Ashley said confidently.

After she left，I took a closer look at the photo.The clock in the background read 4∶15 pm，but our game against Deerfield hadnt started until 4∶30 pm.Why would the boy have taken Perry before we even played？An uneasy feeling came over me that we might have falsely accused someone.I went to Perrys usual caretaker to ask if he knew Perry was missing.“Hes not missing.Hes retired.Hes ready for some quieter days，”he said. Learning the truth，I immediately told Ashley and suggested writing a story to say goodbye to Perry.

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官方范文如下：

To my surprise， Ashley insisted on reporting the “Deerfield Stole Perry” story. “This is the very story we need to attract more readers，” she argued. To convince her， I defended that if we wrote this article， we would be telling a lie. Noticing her hesitant expression， I further explained the potential harm it would cause to the player and our papers reputation. After some discussion， Ashley finally gave in， “OK， lets try with real stories.” Then I went to gather all the necessary information to write an article about Perry and the precious memories we shared over the years.

On Thursday， the paper came out with the headline “Bye-Bye， Perry” on the front page. Soon， it sparked heated discussions among students about Perry. Many were disappointed with Perrys sudden departure， but were comforted by the fact that he was in good care. The story also evoked sweet memories of Perry. Some students even requested to share their stories of him in our paper！ Seeing the storys success， Ashley came to me and said sincerely， “You are right！ Its a good story.” Her words brought me a great sense of fulfillment. Indeed， true stories might not always draw attention， but they have the power to touch and connect．

微技能一：強調

（一）詞匯方式強調

范文第一句：“This is the very story we need to attract more readers，” she argued. 巧妙運用了very一詞，強調了the story的重要性。

（二）用強調句型強調

如果使用強調句型，此句可改寫成：“It is the story that we need to attract more readers，” she argued．

微技能二：非謂語做狀語

（一）非謂語做目的狀語

To convince her， I defended that if we wrote this article， we would be telling a lie．

（二）非謂語做伴隨狀語

Noticing her hesitant expression， I further explained the potential harm it would cause to the player and our papers reputation．

（三）非謂語做原因狀語

Seeing the storys success， Ashley came to me and said sincerely， “You are right！ Its a good story.”

微技能三：謂語動詞三連動： 主+謂A， 謂B and 謂C

范文第一段最后一句：Then I went to gather all the necessary information to write an article about Perry and the precious memories we shared over the years. 可使用此技能，改寫成：Then I went to inquire students online，gathered all the necessary information， and wrote an article about Perry and the precious memories we shared over the years．

微技能四：with復合結構/獨立主格結構

范文第二段第三句和第四句：The story also evoked sweet memories of Perry. Some students even requested to share their stories of him in our paper！ 可以改寫成：With the story evoking sweet memories of Perry， some students even requested to share their stories of him in our paper！ 或者The story evoking sweet memories of Perry， some students even requested to share their stories of him in our paper！

微技能五：形容詞（短語）作狀語

范文第二段第二句：Many were disappointed with Perrys sudden departure， but were comforted by the fact that he was in good care. 可以改寫成：Although/Though disappointed with Perrys sudden departure， many were comforted by the fact that he was in good care．

微技能六：復合句 （定語從句、名詞性從句）

范文第二段倒數第二句：Her words brought me a great sense of fulfillment.可以改寫成：What her words brought me was a great sense of fulfillment. 或者Her words brought me a sense of fulfillment that I havent experienced in a long time．

微技能七：虛擬語氣

范文第二段最后一句：Indeed， true stories might not always draw attention， but they have the power to touch and connect. 可以改寫成：Indeed， true stories might not always draw attention， but without them， our stories wouldnt have the power to touch and connect．

微技能八：倒裝句

范文第二段最后一句：Indeed， true stories might not always draw attention， but they have the power to touch and connect. 可以改寫成：Indeed， unappealing as true stories might be， they have the power to touch and connect．

在寫作實踐中，靈活運用這八種寫作微技能，定能為自己的讀后續寫增分添色。

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