Teenage problems

領" 銜" 人：謝建民（正高級教師，江蘇省特級教師）

組稿團隊：江蘇省無錫市謝建民名師工作室

本期撰稿：陸夢潔（江蘇省江陰市第一初級中學）

Reading 1

“Why did she spill the beans？” I thought regretfully. I’ll always remember that day， when I was so surprised by all the strange looks everyone was giving me. Those thoughts will always stay with me. And I couldn’t believe I would lose the friendship of the person I trusted the most.

Five years back， Sally was the new kid in class. I don’t know what it was， but something unique about her drew me to her. She was the most friendly person I knew. We started as classmates， but after a few months， we were like best friends. So， I never expected her to hurt me in such a big way.

I don’t know what made me tell Sally about my personal life. She made the matter bigger than it was， adding her own spin （傾向性描述） on it and telling everyone at school. It was like someone had stabbed me in the back. After she gave away my secrets， everyone at school started laughing at me， looking at me and giggling（咯咯地笑） whenever I passed by. After this terrible situation， I changed schools. Sally called me many times， but I didn’t answer. My heart was broken.

I tried hard to heal from the scars she left on my heart. I started a new life. Five years later， my life went back to the way it was， with new friends. But one day， I met Anna at the market. She was my classmate from 3rd grade. She told me that Sally wasn’t the one who brought my secrets to light. Mary was. Mary was our school’s big mouth who always wanted to stick her nose into other people’s business.

I was all at sea（不知所措）. I wished I could have asked Sally about this. I wished I could go back in time and fix my mistakes. From that， I learned a life lesson that we should trust those we love because one little mistake could really damage our lives.

Task

What lesson did the author learn from the experience？

Writing 1

壓力可以成為我們前進的動力，也可能成為我們求索路上的絆腳石。對于九年級學生來說，學習壓力增大，而面對學習壓力，不同學生有不同的應對方式。現正值學校開展“Teenagers Week”活動，假如你是李華，決定就“如何減輕學習壓力”問題，給校報投一篇稿件，談談自己的看法。

原文呈現

Nowadays， some students can’t sleep well， and even fell asleep in class. So it’s important to know about some ways to relax.

Doing sports can help us relax and forget about worries. Listening to music is also a good way to relax ourselves. Then， it’s necessary to develop healthy habits. For example， we should go to bed early and keep a good diet. Finally， we can talk with our friends， parents or our teachers often. Tell them about our thoughts and feelings. Try to get help from them.

In a word， a good mood can help us study better and learn better. Don’t worry too much， and everything will be fine.

首段應開門見山，表明文章主旨。在闡述學習壓力表現時，除了壓力大睡不好覺外，還可以多舉些有鮮明特征的例子，比如成績下降、產生自卑心理等。而且fall的過去時態用在此處并不恰當。

小作者在第二段講了很多釋放壓力的方法，想的較為全面，但各方法之間缺少恰當的過渡連接詞，缺乏邏輯性和連貫性。

結尾總結錯誤，上文并沒有提到要保持良好心情。這其實只能放于第二段作為釋放壓力的一種方法，但不能放于總結段。

升格展示

Nowadays， teenagers， who are facing fierce competition， are under great stress in study. Some students don’t have good sleep quality， some even fall asleep in class， and others lack confidence as a result. So it’s important to know about some proper ways to relax ourselves.

First， doing sports can help us relax and forget about worries. Second， going near nature is also a good way to reduce stress in study. Third， it’s necessary to develop healthy habits. For example， we are supposed to go to bed early and keep a balanced diet. Last but not least， we can talk with our friends， parents or our teachers often. Just tell them about what we think and how we feel. They are always ready to offer help.

Therefore， as far as I’m concerned， we should give us more spare time to enjoy life， to get closer to nature and spend more time communicating with our parents and teachers. The most important thing is to believe ourselves that we can deal with any trouble by ourselves or by others’ help.

綜合點評

本篇書面表達旨在給同學們提幾條可行的建議，幫助同學們緩解學習壓力，貼合教材單元主題。首先，小作者在用詞方面進行了仔細琢磨，詞組和句式都比較出彩。其次，小作者在過渡語的使用上也非常到位，點與點之間結構清楚，且邏輯嚴密。最后，小作者充分表達了自己的想法，建議同學們要學會抽出時間享受生活、走進自然，多與他人溝通交流，與我們的實際問題息息相關，升華了主題。