
【寫作任務】
在教育的廣闊天地里,德育教育如同一股清泉,滋養著每一個年輕的心靈。德育教育不僅傳授知識,更能塑造品德、完善人格和引導價值觀,為青少年的成長之路鋪設堅實的基石。
為落實立德樹人根本任務,各學校圍繞德育教育舉辦了一系列的活動,根據下面思維導圖內容提示,以“Moral(德育)Education”為題,寫一篇英語短文,介紹如何踐行德育教育。
要求:
1.書寫認真規范,詞數不少于100詞,開頭已給出,不計入總詞數;
2.短文必須包括所有要點提示,語句通順,意思連貫,可適當發揮;
3.文中不得出現真實姓名和校名。
Moral Education
As teenagers, we are the hope of our country. To be excellent teenagers, let me tell you how to improve our moral education. " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " " "
【試題分析】
本文是一篇材料性命題式書面表達試題,寫作體裁是一篇說明文。試題要求我們根據提示信息要點,圍繞著“Moral Education”這個主題來撰寫一篇說明文,介紹你從家庭、學校和社會等方面接受到的德育教育,表達自己的感想并作出點評。
本文話題屬于學校生活范疇,話題主題是人與社會,由此可知所寫德育教育內容與我們中學生日常學習生活密切相關。大家接受的德育教育可能來自于家庭教育、學校道德與法治學科教育、各個學科情感價值觀教育、朋友交往等社會活動各個方面。依據本文特點,我們可以采取如下三步法來撰寫本文:
第一步,點明主題,說明本文要介紹踐行德育教育。
第二步,詳細介紹如何踐行德育教育。
第三步,總結全文,對德育教育做出點評。
【注意事項】
1.本文是一篇說明文,所寫句子以一般現在時為主,人稱屬于第一人稱。
2.不要遺漏題干給出的要點,可以適當增加細節,靈活運用恰當的句型,使行文流暢自然。
【范文欣賞】
Moral Education
As teenagers, we are the hope of our country. To be excellent teenagers, let me tell you how to improve our moral education.
Firstly, at home, we should do some housework. ①We should also save electricity and water when using them. As for the relationship with our parents, we should have a good communication with them.
Secondly, at school, we should obey the school rules. ②The harder we study, the better we will be in the future. And we should have more creativity.
③What’s more, we can take part in some volunteer activities in our free time. We can plant more trees to protect the environment. And we should try our best to save animals.
Last but not least, we should love our country. ④We should try our best to spread our culture and make our dreams come true."
⑤In a word, as a student, we should not only study hard, but also have good moral character. In the future we’ll build our country and make our country stronger and stronger.
【亮點分析】
①現在分詞短語“when using them”句式簡潔,語意表達清晰,它的使用是本文的一個亮點。
②比較等級句型“The harder we..., the better we will be...”的表達最能吸引讀者眼球,彰顯了作者具有扎實的語言基本功底和語言駕馭能力。
③本文是說明文,文中運用了firstly, secondly, what’s more等承接上下文的過渡性詞語,使得文章上下文過渡自然、段落層次分明。
④短語“try one’s best”及句型“make... do sth.”能給讀者留下深刻印象,增強了文章的可讀性。
⑤“not only... but also...”并列句的運用豐富了文章的句式結構,增強了語言表達力。
【名師點評】
本文要點全面、條理清晰、語言流暢、亮點頗多。作者能夠用英語介紹德育教育的途徑、方法及其意義。文中的句式使用規范且嫻熟,比較狀語從句、并列句、非謂語動詞結構等的使用,彰顯出作者駕馭語言的突出能力。Firstly, secondly, communicate with, take part in, try one’s best等詞匯和短語在文中的靈活運用,更增添了文章的色彩,增強了可讀性。
【寫作演練】
十年樹木,百年樹人。青少年是國家的希望,少年強則國強。假如你是李華,請你寫一篇英語演講稿,談談如何成為一名更好的青少年。
要點:
(1) 你認為中國當代青少年應該具備什么品質;
(2) 你認為怎么做才能成為更好的青少年。
要求:(1) 根據要點提示,可以適當發揮;
(2) 文中不得出現個人真實的姓名和校名;
(3) 詞數 80詞左右。
參考詞匯:keep one’s promise 遵守諾言;be thankful to sb.對某人心存感激;creative有創造力的;beauty美;nature自然;protect保護;activity活動
【參考范文】
How to Be a Better Teenager
Boys and girls,
My name is Li Hua. Today I’m glad to share my ideas about how to be a better teenager with you. As a teenager, I think we should be healthy, creative, honest and thankful. The most important thing is that we must love our country and home.
China is a great country with a long history. We should work hard to make our country stronger and stronger. The more knowledge we learn, the brighter future we will have. We need to keep our promises. Be honest and never lie. We should be thankful to those who have helped us. It is necessary for us to be active.
And we must be good at finding the beauty of nature. It is important for us to love nature and protect the environment. It is helpful to take exercise, which keeps us healthy both physically and mentally. What’s more, we can take part in all kinds of activities in and out of school like planting trees.
All in all, if we show our love in our daily life, we can be anyone we want to be.
That’s all. Thanks for listening.