Where did you go on vacation？

李慶

Most people like traveling on vacation. Last summer I visited Beijing with my family. We went there by train.

It was hot，so we decided to go to the Water Cube， National Swimming Center， to go swimming. But I could not swim well. So it took me a lot of time to learn. I practiced it hard. To my surprised， I could swim the fastest in my family.

The next day， we went somewhere interesting， such as Tiananmen Square， the Palace Museum and so on. We took quite a few beautiful photos there.

In the afternoon， we went to many parks. I saw so many kinds of trees and flowers. I felt really excited when I was in the colorful world. For dinner， we ate Beijing Duck. It tasted delicious though the waiting time was a little long.

In one word， Beijing is a beautiful great city. I hope to visit it again.

簡評：本文緊緊圍繞著“Where did you go on vacation”這一主題展開。文章開頭對此次旅行的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物的概括簡潔明了；中間敘事部分緊張有序，不乏情趣；結(jié)尾表達(dá)再游此地的意愿，恰當(dāng)?shù)厥惆l(fā)了此行的感受。綜觀全文，一般過去時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用得當(dāng)，時(shí)間線索清晰、語言質(zhì)樸、一氣呵成。

（指導(dǎo)教師：丁喜娟）