An unforgettable thing

劉宇

My mother is very strict with me， but she is also kind to me.

I remember when I was eight， I failed a math test. When I heard the thing， I wanted to cry. But I didnt want to leted mother sad. So I went home and closed the door. Finally， her knowed the information. To my surprise， her didnt said nothing to me. I felt very warm.

文甜老師點評：該文通過回憶一件事來表達對媽媽的感激之情，整體上行文流暢，事件描述清楚，但過去時態使用不準確，尤其是動詞的不規則變化錯誤較多，人稱代詞與物主代詞使用混淆，連詞使用也不夠準確。另外，如果能再加上一些感激媽媽的具體行動，文章就更完整了。

范文：

My mother is very strict with me， but she is also kind to me.

I remember when I was eight， I failed a math test. When I heard the news， I wanted to cry because I didnt want to make my mother sad. I went home sadly and closed the door. To my surprise， she didnt criticize me when she knew the truth. Instead， she smiled at me and encouraged me to do better next time. It made me feel warm and know how much she cares about me.

To thank her for her love， I will try my best to study harder and talk more with her. I will help her to do some housework so that she wont be too tired after work. I hope she can be healthy and happy every day！

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一篇好的英語作文，除了語句流暢、準確，意思連貫外，還應做到內容完整，注意要有開頭和結尾。在寫作時，要盡量避免逐句翻譯，多用簡單句，注意代詞、時態的準確運用。