My Classmate

【欄目要求】

1. 將學生習作根據中考分值給出成績； 2. 在應該修改的地方劃線并標注序號；

3. 根據所標序號進行修改并說明修改的理由； 4. 給學生習作點評lt；優點與不足gt；；

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石宇 男，山東省梁山縣楊營中學一級教師，濟寧市優秀教師，濟寧市教學能手，梁山縣優秀班主任；曲阜師范大學英語系畢業，多年擔任畢業班的英語教學，取得了優異成績；輔導的學生在山東省2012年初中生英語競賽中榮獲一等獎；在國家級、省級報刊上發表教學論文多篇。

Li Hua is one of my classmates. We are good friends. Li Hua is kind and warm-hearted. When somebody in her class falls ill， she goes to attend to him or her. When someone has trouble at① his study， Li Hua always helps him with his lessons. As I am not able to knit a sweater， she lends to② me a hand. When classes are over， she is always the first to clean the blackboard. When an old man or woman has difficulty in walking upstairs， she goes to support him or her. In a word， whenever someone is in need， she never stands by.

Although she is so fat， she is still quick in action and full with③ energy. You can often see her on our playground， either playing basketball or volleyball. Sometimes， I make fun of her by saying， “You’d better to④ play football as a gatekeeper.” She just laughed it off.

She always says， “Being lovely makes a person pretty.” I think that it is true of Li Hua since she is such a girl.

山東梁山楊營中學七年級 吳娛

1. 優點：

本文是介紹自己同學的文章，小作者通過列舉事實強調同學李華對其他同學和老師的熱情和友好，體現了她的善良和樂于助人的品質。本文結構嚴謹，層次分明，過渡自然，是一篇值得推薦的學生習作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① at改為in。have trouble in doing sth.意為“做……有困難”；

② 去掉to。lend sb. sth.意為“借給……”；

③ with改為of。be full of意為“充滿……”；

④ 去掉to。had better后加動詞原形。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評分標準，本文修改前可得12分。