My School

【欄目要求】

1. 將學生習作根據中考分值給出成績； 2. 在應該修改的地方劃線并標注序號；

3. 根據所標序號進行修改并說明修改的理由； 4. 給學生習作點評<優點與不足>；

5. 請點評名師提供簡歷一份，包括：學校、職務、 職稱、榮譽、教研教學成果、照片一張。

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My school is very beautiful. There are lots of beautiful flowers and trees in my school but① it is always clean and tidy.

There is a big playground in my school. We have P.E. classes on the playground and we often do sports there. Our teaching building has five floors. My classroom is on the fifth floor. It is big and clean. The computer rooms are on the third floor. There is a big library on the second floor. There are many books in the library. I often read books there. There are some music rooms and art rooms in the teaching building， too. The teachers in our school are very kind. The students are very polite and clever.

I love my school， because its my the② second home.

江蘇省贛榆縣羅陽中學七（5）班 吳甜甜

點評

1. 優點：

小作者首先向我們介紹了她所在學校的整體環境，然后又介紹了操場及教學樓的分布情況，最后點明學校是自己另一個家。文章用詞得當，條理清晰，是一篇優秀的學生習作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① but改為and。由上下文可知，前后是并列關系；

② the去掉。序數詞前有形容詞性物主代詞修飾時，不要加定冠詞the。

3. 評分：

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分20分的評分標準，本文修改前可得18分。