Saying Sorry Twice

Yesterday Zhang Qiang and I were playing happy① in the classroom and didnt notice that Wang Lis pencil box was on the desk. I knocked it off and her pen was broken.

I spoke② sorry to her， but she was still angry with me. As a result， I had a quarrel with her. Our teacher came in and stopped us quarrel③. I said sorry to her again， and told her I would buy her a new pen， but she refused to accept it. I would be more careful when playing.

江蘇省連云港市贛榆區羅陽中學八（3）班 沈長宇

1. 優點：

短文講述了因自己玩耍不小心碰壞了別人的東西，然后發生爭吵和向對方道歉的故事。整篇文章文字流暢、用詞得當，是一篇不錯的學生習作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① happy改為happily。修飾動詞短語“were playing”應使用副詞。

② spoke改為said。“say sorry to sb.”是固定短語，意為“向某人說對不起”。

③ quarrel改為quarreling。“stop sb. （from） doing sth.”是固定短語，意為“阻止某人做某事”。

3. 評分：

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分25分的評分標準，本文修改前可得23分。