兩美元

江西 江海連

One pleasant New Year's morning,Edward got up early and dressed himself very quickly.He wanted to be the first to wish everyone a happy New Year.He looked in every room,and shouted the words of welcome.He ran into the street to repeat them to those he might meet.When he came back,his father gave him two bright new silver dollars.His face lighted up as he took them.He had wished for a long time to buy some pretty books that he had seen at the bookstore.

He left the house with a light heart,intending to buy the books.As he ran down the street,he saw a poor German family,the father,the mother,and three children trembling with cold.

“I wish you a happy New Year,”said Edward,as he was passing by.The man shook his head.“Do you belong to this country?”asked Edward.The man again shook his head,for he could not understand or speak English.But he pointed to his mouth,and to the chil?dren,as if to say,“These little ones have had nothing to eat for a long time.”Edward quickly understood that these poor people were in a very difficult situation and required some help.He took out his dollars,and gave them to the poor family.

How their eyes sparkled(閃耀)with gratitude!They said something in their language,which probably meant,“Thank you so much.”

When Edward came home,his father asked what book he had bought.He hung his head for a moment,but quickly looked up.“I couldn't afford to buy books,”said he.“I gave my money to some poor people,who seemed to be very hungry.”

Reading Check

閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。Paragraph 1:

“I think I can wait for my books till next New Year,”he continued.______________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph 2:

The next day,Edward was stopped by his father._____________________________________________________________________________________________

?寫作指導(dǎo)

一、語篇研讀

要想續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給材料內(nèi)容連貫、銜接緊密，我們必須充分了解所給材料的大意。本文是一篇記敘文，文章分析如下：

二、情節(jié)構(gòu)思

通讀全文后，我們可以知道文章的主題為助人為樂。再根據(jù)文章最后一段和續(xù)寫第一段，我們可以從以下幾個問題切入：

1.What's the attitude of Edward's father to Edward's action?

2.What may Edward's father want to know about the German family?

3.How would Edward explain in detail?

同時，結(jié)合續(xù)寫第二段的段首句“第二天，愛德華被他的爸爸叫住了”，以及文中提及的愛德華想要用父親給的兩美元去書店買心儀已久的書，我們可以從以下幾個問題切入來推測文章的結(jié)局：

1.Why did Edward's father stop Edward?

2.Would he do something special to praise Edward?

3.What did Edward want most according to the text?

4.How about the German family?

三、潤色成篇

在續(xù)寫的過程中我們要注意“續(xù)”的原則，做到主題、情節(jié)、語言風(fēng)格與原文保持一致。具體如下：

1.通過分析，本文的主題是助人為樂，續(xù)寫時應(yīng)注意結(jié)局的設(shè)計(jì)；

2.續(xù)寫的情節(jié)應(yīng)和前面的開始和發(fā)展吻合，根據(jù)人物的性格特點(diǎn)進(jìn)行合理的預(yù)測；

3.續(xù)寫時應(yīng)盡量模仿并運(yùn)用文章的語言風(fēng)格；

4.續(xù)寫時注意句子長短相間，句型豐富，以及語法、用詞、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號的準(zhǔn)確性。

四、續(xù)寫金庫

人物行為描寫

（一）常用詞塊

1.bury one's head in one's hands 雙手抱著頭

2.scratch one's head 撓頭

3.flame with anger 氣得臉通紅

4.have a worried look 愁眉苦臉

5.have an excited expression on one's face 某人的臉上帶著興奮的表情

6.attract one's attention引起某人的注意

7.in the hope of...抱著……的希望

8.in the belief that...相信……

9.be filled with gratitude充滿感激

10.cast a glance at 向……瞥了一眼

11.make a remark on/upon...對……發(fā)表評論

12.struggle to one's feet 掙扎著站起來

（二）常用語句

1.A bright smile spread across his face.他臉上露出了燦爛的笑容。

2.Color rushed to her cheeks when she realized she was being watched.當(dāng)她意識到有人在看她時，她頓時漲紅了臉。

3.He looked his father straight in the eye and answered his question truthfully.他直視父親的眼睛，誠實(shí)地回答了他的問題。

4.He straightened up and looked at me,open?mouthed.他直起身，張著嘴巴看著我。

5.She put her hands to her cheeks in embarrassment.她窘迫地用雙手捂住了臉。

6.When I asked him why he had done it,he just shrugged his shoulders.當(dāng)我問他為什么這么做時，他只是聳了聳肩。

7.Finally,he broke down in tears and poured out his heart to her.最后，他淚流滿面，向她傾訴自己的心聲。

8.The man was dragging through the snow when his wife began walking towards him,trembling with cold.當(dāng)他的妻子朝他走去時，那個男人在雪地里拖著腳步艱難移動，冷得發(fā)抖。

9.I still remember the shock that rooted me flat against the wall.我仍然記得我當(dāng)時驚呆了，靠在墻上一動不動。

10.The pounding in my ears drowned out the rest of the words;only a word here and there filtered through.我耳朵里嗡嗡作響，聽不見其余的話，只有東一點(diǎn)西一點(diǎn)滲入的只言片語。

11.I stared at him in shock and a small sound of dismay escaped my throat.我驚愕地盯著他，不禁發(fā)出輕輕的詫異的聲音。

12.Standing with all the dignity I could muster,I said nothing.我盡可能地保持著尊嚴(yán)站在那里，一句話都沒說。