My Good Friend

Hello， everyone！ I’m Li Hua. I have a good friend. Her name is ZhangYufei. Yufei is her last name and Zhang is her first name淤. She is 13 years oldnow. She has a happy family. Her father is a cooker于and her mother is ateacher. Her sister is a middle school student. They are in the same school.There are four people in her family. She is a tidy girl. Her room is very tidy.Some books are in the bookcase. A computer is on the desk. She has a clock.It’s on the desk， too. Her pencil box is in the schoolbag. She loves her familyand she loves her room， too.

優(yōu)點：

本篇習作介紹了朋友的姓名、年齡、家庭、愛好等方面的信息。文章語言簡潔，句子結(jié)構(gòu)正確，沒有語法錯誤。文章的結(jié)尾表達了對朋友的喜愛，符合初中生的心理特點。

需要修改的地方院

①改為Zhang is her last name and Yufei is her first name.在中文中，姓在前，名在后；在英文中，名在前，姓在后。

②cooker 改為cook。cooker 意為“炊具”，cook 意為“廚師”。

評分院

按中考英語作文滿分15 分的評分標準，本文修改前可得13 分。