生活與學習：豐富、充實、積極向上的生活

寫作要求

豐富、充實且積極向上的生活，是一幅絢麗多彩的畫卷，是心靈深處對美好事物不懈追求的體現(xiàn)。請你講述自己在周末或假期的見聞、經歷，或者對精彩生活的思考和感悟等。

要求：（1）詞數(shù)80左右；（2）條理清晰，語句通順，意義連貫，書寫規(guī)范。

技法點撥

1.審題

（1）審文體：描述一次有意義的經歷為敘述文，可通過具體的細節(jié)來展現(xiàn)積極的體驗和感悟；介紹或表達對有意義的生活的安排，可為說明文。

（2）審主題：文章或明或暗地表達出這次經歷如何豐富了自己的生活，或自己將通過何種方式構建一種豐富、充實且積極向上的生活。

（3）審人稱和時態(tài)：使用第一人稱“我”（I）或“我們”（we）來敘述，以增加文章的真實性和代入感。主要采用一般過去時來敘述自己在已發(fā)生的事中的所見所聞和所感；在表述個人生活的長期規(guī)律性的行為和習慣時，可使用一般現(xiàn)在時；在表述規(guī)劃時可使用一般將來時。

2.列提綱

（1）首段：開門見山，直接點明主題或話題，可以是時間、地點、人物等要素的簡述，或直接表達自己的觀點和立場。

（2）中間段：具體描述見聞與經歷，表達感受；或提出具體的建議并說明原因。

（3）尾段：總結感受，或提出觀點和思考。

河南省鄭州金水外國語學校

學生范文

A Trip to the Zoo

杜昊毅

Today， I went to the zoo because here came two new animals. Let’s go and have a look.

The first animal is a panda. Its name is Feifei. As we all know， panda is the treasure of China. It likes eating bamboo. It is really lovely and shy. It is only two years old.

The other animal is a lion. Its name is Karl. It is from Africa. Its favorite food is meat. And it looks very strong and dangerous. Karl is one year older than Feifei.

I love not only these two animals， but also all animals in the world. Let’s protect animals together.

河南省鄭州麗水外國語學校

指導老師 任雨晨

點 評

文章要點齊全，結構合理，邏輯清晰。在此基礎上，句型結構豐富，連接詞使用得當。“panda is the treasure of China”這句話，不僅展示了作者豐富的詞匯量和良好的表達能力，同時也點明了熊貓對于中國的獨特意義，是本文的亮點。此外，作者通過使用“older than”比較級結構描寫獅子的年齡，讓文章的句型更加豐富。

My Wonderful Trip

時銘霞

Have you ever been to Anhui I have been there several times. It’s actually a beautiful province. I fell in love with it when I first travelled there.

I went to Anhui with my family last Autumn. It was cool and nice， with breeze blowing gently. There， we climbed Mount Huangshan and visited some ancient villages， which are famous scenic spots in Anhui and attract lots of visitors from all over the world every year. In addition， we also watched Huangmei opera， which is so unique that it has become a symbol of Anhui. Apart from that， we also enjoyed Maofeng tea. All of us loved it so much that we bought a lot.

All in all， this trip to Anhui has left me a deep impression that I’ll never forget.

河南省鄭州龍門實驗學校

指導老師 孫夢波

點 評

文章主要介紹了“我”和家人去年秋天去安徽的旅行經歷，解釋“我”喜歡安徽的原因，并在最后以“this trip to Anhui has left me…”一句進行總結，邏輯清晰，結構完整。在語言表達方面，作者能夠靈活運用with復合結構、定語從句以及非限制性定語從句等表達，正確運用現(xiàn)在完成時描述已經發(fā)生的事情，值得肯定。

How to Spend a Meaningful Summer Vacation

樊安隅

The summer vacation is around the corner. How can we spend the vacation in a proper way The measures that I want to tell you are as follows.

First of all， on no account can we waste time on video games. Playing games can not only lead to health problems but also make our relationships with our family worse. We should keep on reading and doing exercise to keep our mind and body healthy. What’s more， we can be volunteers. Just as the saying goes， “The roses in her hands， the flavor in mine.” By helping others in need， we can get a strong feeling of satisfaction.

All in all， on no account can we ignore the importance of spending a meaningful summer vacation. What about you What are your suggestions

河南省鄭州金桂中學

指導老師 辛會勤

點 評

文章結構清晰，開頭直接點題，結尾部分以問句的形式引導讀者思考，增加了互動性。使用表順序的詞，如“First of all”和“What’s more”，使文章邏輯清晰。使用倒裝句“on no account can we…”增強了句子的表達力。文中給出了具體的建議，如避免沉迷于游戲、保持身心健康、參與志愿活動等，還使用了名言“The roses in her hands， the flavor in mine”（贈人玫瑰，手有余香）來支持參加志愿活動的建議，增加了文章的深度和說服力。