2024年12月大學英語四、六級作文試題評析（一）

四級

Directions： Suppose the university newspaper is inviting submissions from the students for its coming edition on how to enrich students’ knowledge of traditional Chinese culture. You are now to write an essay for submission. You will have 30 minutes to write the essay. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這道大學英語四級作文試題要求考生論述如何豐富學生的中國傳統文化知識。所謂豐富學生的中國傳統文化知識，就是讓學生了解更多的中國傳統文化。由于學生是一個正在接受教育的群體，所以本文可以著重闡述學校應該采取哪些措施，才能讓學生更加了解中國的傳統文化。這篇作文屬于說明文的范疇。寫這種類型的作文，考生只需要說清楚怎么做就可以了，議論的成分不多。

我們可以把這篇作文寫三個段落。本文要討論如何豐富學生的中國傳統文化知識，首先的問題是：什么是中國傳統文化？因此本文宜用定義法開頭，即第一段先給中國傳統文化下一個簡明通俗的定義——中國人代代相傳的信仰和行為方式。然后指出學校是傳授這種知識的主要機構。第二段闡述學校應該如何向學生傳授中國傳統文化的知識。中國的傳統文化包羅萬象、博大精深，讓學生了解中國傳統文化的方式也多種多樣。限于篇幅，我們不妨選取兩個方面闡述。首先，學校可以鼓勵學生參與慶祝中國的傳統節日的活動，如春節、端午節和中秋節。通過這些活動學生不僅能了解諸如尊老愛幼這樣的中國風俗，而且還能更深刻地理解中國的傳統價值觀。其次，學校還可以組織豐富多彩的活動以便讓學生了解中國的傳統文化。比如，舉辦傳統服裝時裝秀或民歌演唱比賽。這些活動能夠激勵學生深入探索中國的傳統文化。本文可以用建議法結尾。第三段先指出中國的傳統文化作為我們國家的靈魂，在很大程度上造就了我們。然后建議學校發揮積極的作用，把中國的傳統文化一代一代傳下去。下面請看參考范文：

Traditional Chinese culture refers to Chinese people’s beliefs and behavior that are handed down from one generation to another. Schools are the primary institutions for imparting this knowledge.

As students learn best through experiences， schools can encourage students to participate in the celebration of such traditional Chinese festivals as the Spring Festival， the Dragon Boat Festival and the Mid-Autumn Festival. Through these activities， students not only learn about Chinese customs， such as greeting elders respectfully and caring for the young， but gain a deeper understanding of traditional values. Schools can also organize a variety of activities to help students know about Chinese culture. For instance， a fashion show of traditional costume or a singing competition of folk songs can inspire students to delve deeper into traditional Chinese culture.

As the soul of our nation， traditional Chinese culture is a vital part of what makes us who we are. So schools should play an active role in passing down the knowledge of traditional Chinese culture from generation to generation. （168 words）

語言亮點借鑒：

1. Traditional Chinese culture refers to Chinese people’s beliefs and behavior that are handed down from one generation to another. 中國的傳統文化指的是中國人世代相傳的信仰和行為模式。refer to指的是。這是一個下定義的常用表達。hand down把……傳下去。也可以說pass down。

2. Through these activities， students not only learn about Chinese customs， such as greeting elders respectfully and caring for the young， but gain a deeper understanding of traditional values.通過這些活動，學生們不但了解中國的風俗，比如尊老愛幼，還更加深刻地理解傳統價值觀。learn about了解。values價值觀。

3. For instance， a fashion show of traditional costume or a singing competition of folk songs can inspire students to delve deeper into traditional Chinese culture. 比如，傳統服飾的時裝秀或民歌演唱比賽能夠激勵學生們更深入地探索中國的傳統文化。delve into探究，探索。

4. So schools should play an active role in passing down the knowledge of traditional Chinese culture from generation to generation. 所以學校應當發揮積極作用，把中國傳統文化的知識一代一代傳下去。play an active role/part in在……中發揮積極作用。

六級

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “Nowadays， more and more students have realized the importance of self-discipline in their personal growth.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

這道大學英語六級作文試題要求考生論述“如今越來越多的學生已經意識到自律在個人成長中的作用”?？忌鷮忣}時要善于簡化題目、抓住核心，并提煉出題目中蘊含的觀點。就本題而言，它實際上是要求考生論述自律在學生的個人成長中的重要性。眾所周知，自律對于任何人都很重要，但論述時不能泛泛而談，而是必須緊緊扣住學生這個主體，密切聯系學生的個人成長，否則就偏題了。

本文可以寫三個段落。第一段先表明觀點——如今越來越多的學生已經意識到自律在個人成長中的作用。然后援引上海大學的一項研究來支撐這個觀點。第二段論述為什么自律在學生的個人成長中很重要。我們在論述一個觀點的時候，要善于從幾個不同的方面展開分析。這樣不但使論述更加詳實，而且更有說服力。我們知道，學生的個人成長具體體現在健康方面、學習方面和情感方面。因此我們不妨從健康和學習兩個方面來闡述自律在學生個人成長中的重要性。首先，當一個學生自律，他往往會生活有規律，早早起床、按時鍛煉并且飲食均衡，從而有助于他的身體健康。此外，自律的學生往往更能忍住誘惑，從而避開一些有損健康的危險習慣，比如吸煙或過度飲酒。更重要的是，自律能幫助學生集中注意力。在這個充滿誘惑的世界上，自律的學生更有能力集中精力于學習，這樣就能領先于其他人。第三段先總結全文，重述觀點——自律是一種內在的力量，能夠幫助學生保持健康、戒除惡習并把精力集中在學習上。最后建議每一個學生都學會自律，以便讓自己身體健康和學業成功。下面請看參考范文：

Nowadays， more and more students have realized the importance of self-discipline in their personal growth. Shanghai University recently conducted a survey among its seniors and 84.2 of those polled said that self-discipline had played a pivotal role in their life.

Everything a student wants to do in life requires self-discipline， from keeping fit to excelling academically. When a student is self-disciplined， he tends to lead an orderly life， getting up early， exercising regularly and having a balanced diet， which contributes to his physical well-being. He also tends to resist temptations. Thus he is better able to avoid dangerous habits that can compromise his health， such as smoking or excessive drinking. More importantly， being self-disciplined helps a student concentrate. In a world that is full of distractions， a self-disciplined student is more likely to stay focused on his work and therefore be ahead of the pack.

Self-discipline is the inner strength that helps students to stay healthy， abstain from bad habits and concentrate on their studies. It is advised that every student learn self-discipline in order to be healthy and successful. （180 words）

語言亮點借鑒：

1. Shanghai University recently conducted a survey among its seniors and found that 84.2 of those polled said self-discipline has played a pivotal role in their life.上海大學最近在該校四年級學生中做了一項調查，結果發現84.2%的受訪者說自律在他們的人生中起了關鍵性的作用。polled接受調查的。這個過去分詞做定語時，要放在所修飾的名詞或代詞之后。pivotal關鍵性的。

2. When a student is self-disciplined， he tends to lead an orderly life， getting up early， exercising regularly and having a balanced diet， which contributes to his physical well-being. 當一個學生自律，他往往會生活有規律，早早起床、按時鍛煉并且飲食均衡。這有助于他的身體健康。tend to do sth往往會做某事。contribute to有助于。

3. Thus he is better able to avoid dangerous habits that can compromise his health， such as smoking or excessive drinking. 這樣他就更有能力避開一些可能損害健康的危險習慣，比如吸煙或過度飲酒。better adv.更加。compromise損害，危及。

4. In a world that is full of distractions， a self-disciplined student is more likely to stay focused on his work and therefore be ahead of the pack. 在這個充滿干擾的世界上，一個自律的學生更有可能把注意力集中在學習上，從而領先于競爭者。distraction使人分心的事。the pack競爭對手。

5. Self-discipline is the inner strength that helps students to stay healthy， abstain from bad habits and concentrate on their studies. 自律是內在的力量，幫助學生保持健康、遠離惡習和集中精力于學習。abstain from避免，遠離。studies （pl.）功課，學業。

* 上海外國語大學國際新聞碩士，講師，專注大學英語寫作教學十余年。

Discipline Quotes for Students

Talent without working hard is nothing.

——Cristiano Ronaldo

Discipline is doing what you hate to do but doing it like you love it.

——Mike Tyson

I hated every minute of training， but I said， ‘Don’t quit. Suffer now and live the rest of your life as a champion.’

——Muhammad Ali

Success is no accident; it’s hard work， perseverance， learning， and discipline.

——Pelé

Without commitment， you’ll never start; without discipline， you’ll never finish.

——Denzel Washington

You miss 100% of the shots you don’t take.

——Wayne Gretzky