英語優秀作文賞評

瞿峰

[真題還原]

假設你叫李華，在你居住的小區有很多亂涂亂寫的現象，有人在此做廣告，有人在這里畫畫，甚至罵人。請你根據下圖內容，結合生活實際，給中國日報China Daily寫一篇文章反映這種現象，說明自己對這一現象的看法，并提出解決辦法。

注意：1.根據以上內容寫一篇短文，不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節以使行文連貫；2.準確使用語法和詞匯，使用一定的句型、詞匯，清楚、連貫地表達自己的意思；3.詞數：100個左右。開頭已給出，不計入總詞數。

Dear editor，

What the picture shows is just a common scene in the neighborhoods where we live， whether it is in city or in town. Public places are now made too much use of by people.

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Your sincerely， Li Hua

[學生佳作]

Dear editor，

What the picture shows is just a common scene in the neighborhoods where we live， whether it is in city or in town. Public places are now made too much use of by people. Some make drawings or practising their handwriting on walls in these places to show their talents or for fun. Some take advantage of such public places to make free advertisements. Others even put dirty words in these places to curse those whom they dont like.

In my point of view， measures should be taken by local administration organizations to keep public places tidy， clean and well preserved. On the other hand， people should mind their behaviors . As we know， the imageof a neighborhoodor a city is reflected especially in public places. The practices above spoil our living environmentand the impression on travelers to our hometown.

Yours sincerely， Li Hua

[教師點評]

本篇看圖作文針砭時弊，反映我們現實生活中的不良現象。話題新穎，描述了圖畫中的現象，并發表自己的看法，該生組織文字材料和寫作的能力都比較高。

[真題還原]

假設你校舉行題為“網吧的危害（Harmful Influence of Cyber Centers）”的征文活動。請根據下圖寫一篇英語短文，描述圖中的內容，并就其反映的現象發表評論和提出方案。

要點提示：

1.一位父親在找兒子2.街上滿是網吧3.兒子在網吧玩4.描述網吧多的現狀5.網吧的危害（評論）6.解決方案

注意：

1.詞數：100左右；2.可適當增添細節，以使行文連貫；3.文中不可使用真實姓名和學校名稱；

4.參考詞匯：網吧：cyber center.

[學生佳作]

As we can see in the picture， a father is anxiously looking for his son addicted to online games. It seems that he has great trouble finding the boy because the street is full of cyber centers and he hardly knows in which one his son is enjoying games.

Nowadays， more and more cyber centers are being opened under cover of improving intelligence. In reality， these are places where large numbers of teenagers run into online chat or games and can rarely be pulled out. In my opinion， serious measures should be taken to reduce the number of cyber centers as well as to help teenagers develop some other hobbies which do them good.

[教師點評]

本篇寫作的話題是關于網吧對中學生的危害，描述了圖中的內容，并發表評論和提出方案。這樣的話題與中學生的生活密切相關，是近年中考英語書面表達的熱點話題。

（作者單位：山東臨沂臨港經濟開發區臨港一中）