?話題作文
——活動與經歷

江西 邱世才

★話題概述

有關活動與經歷的話題作文一般記錄某項具體活動或者生活中的某一方面的經歷,同時也記錄下了作者在這些活動或經歷中所遇到的趣事、參與其中所得到的體會與感受等。

此類話題作文多為記敘文。由于活動或經歷大都發生在過去,所以在敘述所見所聞的時候,文章往往以一般過去時的表達為主。

★佳作賞評

An unforgettable day

March 5th was a special day.Let me tell you what we did that day．

On the morning of March 5th,some volunteers from our school went to the People's Nursing Home.The elderly gave us a warm welcome when we got there.We handed flowers and fruit to them,and gave them our best wishes.Then we helped them to do some housework,such as cleaning the windows or making the bed for them.All the old people were smiling at us while we were working．

After that,some of us gave a performance for them,such as singing songs and dancing.Some of us read the newspaper for them.Some chatted with them.When it was time for us to leave,they were grateful for our kindness．

From this meaningful activity,I have learned that we should care for the old and respect them.In our daily life,we should offer our seats to them on a bus and we should chat with them as much as possible.I hope we can have some chances to work for the old people together once again．

【權威點評】

本文記敘了在3月5日“學雷鋒紀念日”這天,學校組織志愿者去人民敬老院開展志愿活動的經歷,并準確地表達了志愿者們參加志愿活動的感受。從寫作的基本框架來看,作者是分為四個自然段完成全文的。具體情況如下：

1.第1段直接開篇點題。該段中的a special day與標題直接相呼應。

2.第2、3段為詳細描寫。這兩段先后交代了本次活動的時間(March 5th)、地點(the People's Nursing Home)、人物(some volunteers from our school)和活動過程(hand flowers and fruit,give best wishes,do some housework,clean the windows,make the bed,give a performance)等。

3.第4段簡談活動后的感想。從活動中，作者感受到大家在生活中應該照顧好老人(care for the old),并尊重老人(respect the old)。“we should...”的兩次使用,更深化了主旨。

文中的give sb.a warm welcome,give sb.one's best wishes,help sb.to do sth.,be grateful for,chat with sb.,care for sb.等短語和when,while等從句的使用,顯示出作者較好的語言基本功。

總之,全文結構安排合理,句式及詞語運用恰當,是一篇比較成功的英語作文。

★思路點撥

finish,have a good time...

【典型句型】

1.We went to...我們去了……

2.We visited... 我們參觀(游覽)了……

3.We went there by...我們乘坐……去了那里

4.How happy we were!我們太高興了!

5.All of us were very tired,but happy that day.那天我們都很累了,但是很高興。

★題例解析

【寫作導學】

記敘活動或經歷的作文屬于記敘文的范疇。對待此類話題的英語作文,在寫作時，我們應該注意以下幾個方面的問題：

1.明確寫作的標題。這類話題的英語作文常采用“An unforgettable...”“A pleasant...”等作為標題。

2.準確應用人稱和時態。記敘活動或經歷的文章通常使用第一人稱。如果描述他人的活動情況,可以使用第三人稱。無論以何種人稱呈現,時態多以一般過去時為主。

3.注重文章結構或布局。記敘活動或經歷的文章主要是從時間、地點、人物、活動和感想幾個方面進行布局謀篇。做到這些,我們就能使活動經歷的敘述更加順暢、更有條理。文章結尾往往使用諸如“We all had a good time./We learned a lot from the farmers./What a pleasant day we had!”的句子表達對此次活動或經歷的感想、體會,從而深化文章的主題。

【高頻詞語】

volunteer,together,arrive in/at,get to,go to...with sb.,help sb.(to)do sth.,each other,special day,experience,chat with,care for,enjoy doing,

昨天是端午節,你們班去陽光學校看望留守兒童,給他們送一些書,并參與一些活動。請你以“A pleasant day”為題，給校刊寫一篇英語文章,記錄當天的活動情況。

要點提示：

1.與留守兒童一起高興地包粽子、表演節目,并與他們談心；

2.談談你對此次活動的感想。

具體要求：

1.短文應包含所有的提示要點,也可適當增加某些細節,以使行文連貫；

2.詞數不能少于100。

參考詞匯：Dragon Boat Festival端午節,zongzi粽子,left-behind children留守兒童

A pleasant day

【寫作提示】

從所給的題目(A pleasant day)和具體要求可以看出,這是一篇記述端午節去陽光學校看望留守兒童的文章。具體思路如下：

一、結構安排

全文可以分為三個自然段。第一段直接點題,記錄活動的時間、地點、主題等情況。短文開頭以“Yesterday”為提示,點明活動的時間,為短文的時態定好基調；第二段重點介紹當天的活動,如留守兒童帶領大家參觀陽光學校、一起包餃子、表演節目、留守兒童喝彩、一起聊天等；第三段用帶有強烈感情色彩的簡短句子,抒發感受,呼應主題。

二、建議詞匯

the Sunshine School,send our regards to sb.,by bike/by bus,go there on foot,walk there,show sb.around,make zongzi together,perform,cheer for sb.,chat with sb.,each other...

三、句型推薦

1.After we got there,the left-behind children showed us around the Sunshine School./The leftbehind children showed us around the Sunshine School after we got there.

2.Weperformedforthethem and they cheered for us./We gave a performance for them and they cheered for us.

3.All of us were very tired,but happy that day./How happy we were!

四、時態與人稱

本文是對過去活動的描述,因此應該以一般過去時為主。根據題目中“談談你對此次活動的感想”等內容判斷,人稱應以第一人稱為主,適當穿插其他人稱。for it for a long time.

In the morning,we met at the school gate.Then we walked there.The left-behind children showed us around the Sunshine School after we got there.We gave some interesting books to them and they felt very happy.We made zongzi together happily.In the afternoon,we performed for them and they cheered for us.After that,we chatted with each other.They were grateful for our help,too.

How happy we were!Helping others is very important in our lives.As the saying goes,“Giving is much better than receiving.”

★嘗試練筆

去商店購物是日常生活中很常見的活動。在購物時,你遇到過有趣或難忘的事情嗎？請以“A pleasant shopping experience”為題寫一篇英語短文,敘述你在“購物”時的所見所聞,并談談你的感想。

具體要求：

1.層次清晰,意思連貫,用詞準確,書寫規范；

3.詞數80～100。

A pleasant shopping experience

【參考范文】

A pleasant day

YesterdaywasDragonBoatFestival.My class went to the Sunshine School to help the leftbehind children there and send our regards to them.We were very happy to do that and prepared

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