My mom's surprise媽媽的禮物

河南 陳志強

Step 1感知·閱讀導航

話題導入

母愛是醉人的春風，是潤物的細雨，是相伴你一生的盈盈笑語，是你漂泊天涯的縷縷思念。母愛是一根棒棒糖，讓你在甜蜜中感受到快樂；母愛是一本厚厚的書，讓你懂得許許多多的人生道理。母愛是孩子最早、最溫暖、最安全、最永恒的港灣。正是這一種特殊的生命相連的形式，讓母愛在孩子們的生命中起著無可替代的作用，創造了一個又一個的奇跡，不斷引領著孩子們走向成熟，走向更加波瀾壯闊的人生舞臺。

閱讀目標

1.梳理故事的情節，把握故事的開始、發展、高潮、結局，培養閱讀敘事類語篇時的主線意識。

2.分析語篇中的細節描寫，如語言描寫、動作描寫和心理描寫等，推測語篇中母親及“我”的性格特征。

3.體諒母親的不易，思考母親給孩子帶來的巨大變化，理解母愛的偉大。

4.體會“我”情感變化的過程及原因，體會成長的真正含義，不斷形成強大的內心力量，做一個內心充實、不役于外物的人。

讀前預熱

Ⅰ.Brainstorming

Have you ever received any presents from your mother on your birthday?What present would you like on that day?What if you received no present from your mother then?

Ⅱ.Exploring a story

Do you like sharing stories with others?The following diagram for a story may help you to be a top storyteller.Look at it carefully and then discuss the following question with your partners:how can I narrate my story in a plain but complete way?

1I lay on my bed,legs leaning against the wall,desperately wishing my mother would call.But I remembered the last time I'd seen her,right before the train for Providence pulled out of the station.“You know how expensive it is to call,” she said,and then hugged me tight and said goodbye.

2This was my first birthday away from home.I missed my mom,missed my sister,and most certainly missed the special pound cake my mother always made for my birthday.Since getting to college that year,I would watch jealously as the other freshmen received care packages from their parents on their birthdays—and even on ordinary days.Big boxes containing summer slacks and blouses,packages of M&M's and Snickers,things they needed and things they didn't.Instead of feeling thrilled about my upcoming eighteenth birthday,I felt empty.I wished my mom would send me something,too,but I knew that she couldn't afford presents or the postage.She had done her best with my sister and me—raising us by herself.The simple truth was that there just was never enough money.

3But that didn't stop her from filling us with dreams. “You can be what you want to be,” she would tell us. “Politicians,dancers,writers—you just have to work for your dreams;you have to get an education.”

4Thanks to my mom's sacrifices（犧牲）and big dreams,I'd made it to the Ivy League:Brown University in Providence,Rhode Island.

5As I was recalling these things,my roommate joined me on the bed.“Hey.After we study,let's buy ice cream and cake.”I nodded,closed my eyes,and imagined the cake Mom would have made.Mmm.I could see the golden yellow of each of the twelve eggs,and I could almost smell the vanilla(香草)filling the house while the cake baked.

6As I daydreamed,there was a knock on the door.My roommate opened it to find a deliveryman asking for me.He handed her a large box,which she carefully placed on the desk near my bed.“Open it.” I did,and inside was a vanilla cake with chocolate frosting.In icing were the words:“Happy Birthday,Sande!Love,Mom.” I was filled with excitement,as if Mom were right there hugging me close.

7How had she managed to afford it?I felt as if I were back at home with her,safe and secure while she sang and told me how much she loved having me in her life.I ran out to the hall and knocked on my dormmates'doors.“Birthday cake,” I called.I cut cakes for the dormmates gathering in my room and watched their faces as they ate,because I didn't need to eat to feel both full and rich inside.

Step 2 理解·文本解讀

Ⅰ.Read for some basic elements of the story

My mom's surprise

My mom and I

·I would spend my 2.________birthday at school.

·My family was 3.________.

I wished to receive Mom's 4.________.

Ⅱ.Read for the plot

Complete the story mountain with the best choice for the plot.

A.I wished for my mom's call or presents desperately.

B.I shared the cake with my dormmates.

C.Mom asked a deliveryman to send me a vanilla cake.

D.Mom couldn't afford to call me or buy me a present.

E.I'd spend my first birthday away from home.

Ⅲ.Read for the changes of my feelings

T y p e s C l u e s F e e l i n g s B e h a v i o r a l d e s c r i p t i o n I l a y o n m y b e d,l e g s l e a n i n g a g a i n s t t h e w a l l,d e s p e r a t e l y w i s h i n g m y m o t h e r w o u l d c a l l.B u t I r e m e m b e r e d t h e l a s t t i m e I'd s e e n h e r,r i g h t b e f o r e t h e t r a i n f o r P r o v i d e n c e p u l l e d o u t o f t h e s t a t i o n.1.P s y c h o l o g i c a l d e s c r i p t i o n 2.___________s a d/h o m e s i c k/l o n e l y P s y c h o l o g i c a l d e s c r i p t i o n I w i s h e d m y m o m w o u l d s e n d m e s o m e t h i n g,t o o,b u t I k n e w t h a t s h e c o u l d n't a f f o r d p r e s e n t s o r t h e p o s t a g e.S h e h a d d o n e h e r b e s t w i t h m y s i s t e r a n d m e—r a i s i n g u s b y h e r s e l f.T h e s i m p l e t r u t h w a s t h a t t h e r e j u s t w a s n e v e r e n o u g h m o n e y.3.__________P s y c h o l o g i c a l d e s c r i p t i o n 4.__________e x c i t e d/s u r p r i s e d B e h a v i o r a l/V e r b a l/P s y c h o l o g i c a l d e s c r i p t i o n I r a n o u t t o t h e h a l l a n d k n o c k e d o n m y d o r m m a t e s'd o o r s.“B i r t h-d a y c a k e,”I c a l l e d.I c u t c a k e s f o r t h e d o r m m a t e s g a t h e r i n g i n m y r o o m a n d w a t c h e d t h e i r f a c e s a s t h e y a t e,b e c a u s e I d i d n't n e e d t o e a t t o f e e l b o t h f u l l a n d r i c h i n s i d e.5.___________

Ⅳ.Read for the theme of the narrative

1.What overall changes happened to me after I received my mom's present according to the narrative?Please find as many changes as possible.If necessary,please discuss it with your partners.

2.What drove me to change profoundly?For this change,what would I say to my mom?Please try to share your opinion based on the narrative.

Step 3 運用·讀寫整合

Situational writing

Supposing you're the author of this narrative,with the annual Mother's Day drawing near,you hope to write a narrative about your mother with the title “My mom's surprise” and contribute to Crazy English.Please write a narrative to the magazine.

Writing essentials:

1.narration of the story;

2.your evaluation.

Writing requirements:

1.your narrative should be about 100 words;

2.your narrative can include some details if necessary.

Step 4 提升·素養建構

一、遷移運用

從敘事模式看高考記敘文的寫作

《普通高中英語課程標準（2017年版2020年修訂）》要求學生“接觸和學習不同類型的語篇，熟悉生活中常見的語篇形式，把握不同語篇的特定結構、文體特征和表達方式”。記敘文的寫作是普通高中英語課程語篇類型內容要求在必修階段的重要內容之一，在近年的高考中也屢見不鮮。對記敘文的寫作，同學們要使用合理的語篇策略，有效地推進故事的敘述。記敘文中的敘述通常要包括who、when、why、what、where以及how六大要素。 在敘述過程中可采用“Setting—Beginning—Cause/Climax—Resolution—Ending—Evaluation”的Story mountain模式，推進對故事的敘述。當然，有些環節可以根據故事的情節予以靈活處理，或詳寫，或略寫，或省略不要。

（2013·浙江卷）請以“One Thing I'm Proud of”為題，用英語寫一篇100—120個詞的短文，記述一件自己認為得意的事情。要求如下：

1.記述事情經過；

2.簡要說明你感到得意的原因或從中得到的啟示。

注意：文章的標題已給出（不計詞數）。

【范文誘思】

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二、閱讀評價

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