Suggestions to My Friend

Dear Li Ran，

Thanks for your letter. I think you have two problems. On the one hand， you have such plenty of homework to do that you nearly have no time to relax. On the other hand， you have too much pressure， so you always feel nervous. Then I will help you deal with them.

To start with， nothing is more important than making a perfect plan which suits you. It should include everything you do within a day. If you do that， you will finish your homework effectively. In addition， there is no doubt that learning to relax is a good way to reduce your pressure. Except for talking with people， we can also do other things to relax ourselves such as riding， walking or listening to the relaxing music. Actually， it’s necessary to talk with your parents， teachers or friends. The reason why we should talk with them is that expressing yourself can make your heart relaxed， warm and be full of power.

If you accept my suggestions， I promise you will work out all problems little by little.

Best wishes.

Yours，

Xu Ziyang

河南省鄭州龍門實驗學校

指導老師 王勝楠

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