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對于讀寫任務的發表看法部分,有的考生還懵懵懂懂,不得其法。有的考生雖然功底不錯,但是總會出現要點不全,部分偏題,段落間邏輯混亂等情況,最終導致這部分難以得高分,甚至難以及格,讓人扼腕痛惜。故筆者針對這些情況,總結出16字:各為一段、順序寫作、開段點題、層層深入。
一、各為一段
在平時的評卷過程中,總會發現有的學生整篇文章只有兩段,概括為一段,發表看法為一段。這樣導致評卷教師評卷時很難找其要點。甚至有的考生,這個要點寫一句,又參雜另一個要點,再回到頭一個要點,條理不清,邏輯混亂弄得評卷老師哭笑不得。雖然各要點需要有主有次,詳略得當,但是有的考生對該展開寫作的要點不展開,一句話帶過。 “各為一段”, 即根據讀寫任務的要求,每個要點為一個段落。要點躍然紙上,條理清晰。
二、順序寫作
“順序寫作”, 即不要輕易打破試卷上給出的要點順序。英語試卷中要點先后給出是有一定邏輯關系的。第一個要點先寫,第二個要點后寫,按照順序來,邏輯關系相對緊密。
三、開段點題
布置好段落和寫作順序后,就需要“開段點題”,寫好每個段落的中心句。就算是不寫出中心句,也要與要點緊密相關。如2013年廣東高考英語讀寫任務的三個要點可以這樣寫:
要點一:
1. You can hardly come across a cleaning worker except in the early morning for they always get up early to avoid the busy people. (艱辛)
2. When it comes to the ordinary work, nobody can deny the fact that cleaning is the most tiring and dirty work. (艱辛)
要點二:
1. I cant imagine what a city would be like without a cleaning worker. (沒有清潔工)
2. However, we ought to appreciate and respect the cleaning workers, whose work ensures us a clean environment. Just imagine what would come to peoples life because of absence of cleaning workers. (沒有清潔工)
要點三:
1. Every ordinary job like cleaning has its own value, without which the whole society would come into a mess. (對平凡工作的看法)
2. So every ordinary job like cleaning matters in our daily life and every single ordinary worker deserves our respects. (對平凡工作的看法)
四、層層深入
“層層深入”要求考生在每個段落中心句寫完以后,要緊緊圍繞該中心句展開寫作,展開方式有因果法、并列法、順承法等。考生在寫作時,須牢牢記住每個句子皆是為要點服務,圍繞要點來寫。
當然,考生要得到一個滿意的分數,還需在用詞、句式、邏輯關系等方面下功夫,做到用詞地道,“洋氣”十足,句式多樣,錯落有致,上下連貫,結構緊湊。
以下兩篇文章就是按照“16字”訣寫成,以饗讀者:
1. You can hardly come across a cleaning worker except in the early morning for they always get up early to avoid the busy people. Wearing a mask, they spent hour after hour putting rubbish together, loading it onto the garbage truck and then carrying it away. It hits me how tiring it is for a cleaning worker to do his regular work every day and even he has to swallow the prejudice from others.
I cant imagine what a city would be like without a cleaning worker. Rubbish without being cleared would pile up,becoming a small mountain and give off bad smells of rotted wastes. People would live or work in such a dirty and messy environment that they cant focus on their work, and worse still, their health would also suffer.
Every ordinary job like cleaning has its own value, without which the whole society would come into a mess. Any behavior to classify them is not right. Only when the ordinary work is well completed can our society function properly.
2. When it comes to the ordinary work, nobody can deny the fact that cleaning is the most tiring and dirty one. The cleaning workers works long hours cleaning the streets before people get up. They bathe themselves in the dusty air and breathe the bad smell produced by the rotted wastes. Their sweaty clothes can hardly get dry because of long time in cleaning and removing the rubbish.
However, we ought to appreciate and respect the cleaning workers, whose work ensures us a clean environment. Just imagine what would come to peoples life because of absence of cleaning workers. Piles of rubbish would remain where it is, giving off bad smell, which would not only cause pollution to the city but destroy the hope people hold for life.
So every kind of ordinary work like cleaning matters in our daily life and every single ordinary worker deserves our respects. Without their tiring and boring work, our society would lose its function. And every single ordinary worker should also value your job and attach more importance to it. Only in this way can our society go on better.
(作者單位:惠來縣慈云實驗中學)
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