安徽 吳安運
★指點迷津
介紹某個人的情況,即為人物介紹。在學習、工作和生活中,常常要介紹、推銷自己或宣傳他人,這都需要作人物介紹。
寫人物介紹,首先要全面了解這個人,然后根據需要選取寫作內容。簡明扼要且突出重點地去介紹,力求真實準確,恰如其分。人物介紹一般包括出生年月、主要經歷、事跡成就和影響與評價等內容。人物介紹往往是從外形到性格,或從一般經歷到創造性的貢獻,最后常有結論性的評語。寫人物介紹的英語作文時,經常會用到以下詞匯:
身份簡歷:player“運動員”;pop singer“流行歌手”;movie star“電影明星”;comic star“笑星”;actor/actress“男演員/女演員”;writer“作家”;hero“英雄”;during“在……期間”;graduate“畢業”;come from“來自于”;be born in“出生于”;die of“死于……”;make money“掙錢”;make a living“謀生”;a poor family“一個貧窮的家庭”;be interested in...“對……感興趣”;try one's best to do“盡力做……”;live a...life“過著……的生活”;start to do“開始做”;with the help of...“在……的幫助下”;in life“在一生中”
影響評價:well-known“著名的”;be famous for...“以……著名”;great“偉大的”;unforgettable“難忘的”;in history“歷史上”;be popular with“受歡迎”;be kind to...“對……充滿愛心”;win the prize“獲得獎勵”;strong will“堅強的意志”;ready to help others“樂于助人”
★寫作模板
【模板】1
第一段:總說。例如:My name is...I would like to...
第二段:具體介紹個人情況。例如:I was born in...I am good at...Besides,I show...Also,I enjoy...
第三段:結尾,進行評價。例如:I look forward to...
【模板】2
My name is______.I come from______.I am______years old.I am a______girl/boy.I am fond of______.In a word,______.
【模板】3
______was born on______in______.He/She is a______.He/She is______.He/She likes______.
★典例分析1
人的一生中會遇到很多的人,給你留下印象最深的人是誰呢?請以“A person I will never forget”為題,寫一篇英語短文。
寫作要求:
1.短文內容應包括人物的外貌、性格、愛好和使你難忘之處等;
2.詞數80左右。
【題目解讀】
這是一篇描寫人物形象的作文,雖然題目已給出,開放性卻非常大,自由度比較高。學生在有限的時間內要做的工作就非常多:對內容進行構思,對材料進行篩選,語言如何組織,中心怎樣提出等。這些對學生來說都是非常大的挑戰。
應對此類文章,必須認真理解題目,抓住有限信息,找準具體的實例來反映主題,從而進行寫作。本文的大致結構:引出主人公——外貌、性格、愛好描寫——難忘的特別之處。
注意:應以第一人稱和第三人稱進行習作;時態以一般現在時為主;語言的過渡要靈活、生動與連貫。【佳作賞析】
A person I will never forget
The person I will never forget is Miss Wang,my junior high school English teacher.①She was tall and nice with long hair.She is also active because she is fond of playing tennis,traveling and listening to music.② In addition,Miss Wang is kind and responsible.③At first,no matter how hard I tried,I couldn't do well in English.④It was Miss Wang who gave me a hand in time.⑤And my English has improved a lot now.
How lucky I am a student of Miss Wang!⑥
亮點分析:本文層次清晰,要點全面,發揮合理。首先點題,然后描述細節,最后歸納。復合句和強調句的多處使用,不但使人物形象栩栩如生,而且讓文章亮點倍出,風采非凡。
①文章開門見山,直奔主題,作者充分利用題目的提示,出色地完成了文章的導入。不但使用了定語從句,還用了一個同位語來做解釋,可見作者深厚的語言功底。
②用了一個復合句,讓讀者明白了一個道理:一個人的性格與愛好是緊密相連的。原因狀語從句中be fond of使用準確、到位。
③responsible的使用間接地起到了承上啟下的作用——正是因為她的負責任才引出接下來的事情。
④no matter how引導的讓步狀語從句的出現,充分顯示了語言表達的豐富性。
⑤強調句的使用更是文章點睛之筆,展現了作者超強的寫作功底。
⑥最后作者用感嘆句進行總結、點題,給全文畫上一個圓滿的句號。
【參考范文】
The person I'll never forget is my English teacher.He's a tall man with thick glasses.He likes sports and often plays football and basketball with us.He's humorous and always makes his classes lively and interesting.He's kind but is strict with us.He never allows us to pretend that we know what we don't know.He often tells us that it's no use memorizing new words without understanding.My English has greatly improved with his help.
★典例分析2
用微笑播撒陽光,用行動踐行夢想,用一種無形的精神力量感染著身邊的每一個人,為同學們樹立一個個積極向上的榜樣——這就是“陽光少年”。
某中學自開展“向陽光少年學習”的活動以來,先后涌現出了許許多多的“陽光少年”。請你以“A sunshine teenager”為題寫一篇英語短文,介紹一位你身邊的“陽光少年”( Xiao Hui)。
要點提示:
1.誠實善良、團結友愛、樂于助人;
2.熱情、活潑、開朗、樂觀向上;
3.熱愛勞動、不怕困難、心懷感恩,積極為父母、師長分憂;
4.勤奮好學,積極參加各種文體活動。
參考詞匯:
friendly,be ready,warm-hearted,outgoing,active,housework,be afraid,share,take an active part in,share...with...
寫作要求:
1.內容完整,語言流暢,不要逐句翻譯提示內容;
2.詞數不少于80(開頭已給出,但不計入總數)。
A sunshine teenager
Since our school started the activity“Learn from Sunshine Teenagers”,___________________________________________________________________________________________________,Xiao Hui is a good example for us to learn from.
【題目解讀】
從所給素材可看出,本文是一篇記敘文。題目要求根據提示介紹一位“陽光少年”,還給出了參考詞匯,不需要考生再去另外發揮。但要注意,所給的漢語提示都無主語,寫作時切忌寫出沒有主語的英語句子。提綱要點很多,寫作中容易寫出較呆板的千篇一律的He is...或She is...等句子。我們應靈活使用各種句子結構,同時語言表達要準確、流暢。
【寫作要點】
1.開場呈現背景信息,自我介紹,引入話題;
2.介紹Xiao Hui的相關情況,即提示信息的1~4條;
3.總結全文,再次說明要向Xiao Hui學習。
特別提醒:本文屬于人物介紹的記敘文,通篇應該以第三人稱和一般現在時為主。在敘述各要點時,盡量避免使用單一的句式,注意充分利用所給的參考詞匯。
【佳作賞析】
A sunshine teenager
Since our school started the activity“Learn from Sunshine Teenagers”,we have seen a lot of such students.①Today I'll introduce one of them to you,whose name is Xiao Hui.
Xiao Hui is always kind and honest to everyone around him.He is so friendly and ready to help others that we all like to make friends with him.② Besides,as a warm-hearted and outgoing teenager,he is active in his daily life,and often shares the housework with his parents.③He also helps to take care of the old when they're in trouble.As a student,he always works hard at his lessons,and he is also active in many kinds of sports after school.④He has joined some clubs like the music club and the art one.
As a sunshine teenager,Xiao Hui is a good example for us to learn from.⑤
亮點分析:本習作圍繞提示的要點,首先總體交代背景信息,然后逐條敘述,最后總結。在敘述中,注意恰當地運用介詞短語、過渡性詞語和狀語從句等,充分展示了英語詞匯和句型的魅力,是一篇不可多得的優秀作文。
①談到學校開展的活動,以及身邊出現的變化,內容環環緊扣,敘述有條理。
②本句把提示信息中松散的要點結合在一起,“so...that+狀語從句”、短語be ready to do和make friends with的使用更體現出詞匯的豐富多彩。
③本句用besides作為過渡詞,以as構成的介詞短語來羅列要點,避免了句式的單一。
④本句講到主人公勤奮好學并且積極參加各種活動,表達十分準確。
⑤總結全文,回應主題,使全文成為一個整體,從而起到了畫龍點睛的作用。
【參考范文】
Hello!My name is Xiao Ming.I'm studying in No.1 Middle School.Our school had an activity called“Learn from Sunshine Teenagers”.From then on,there are many sunshine teenagerscoming out around us.
Xiao Hui is one of them.He is honest and kind.He gets on well with others.He is always ready to not only help others but also go to the old people's home to do something for the old.He reads newspapers for them,cleans their rooms and washes their clothes.Also he is warm-hearted,active and outgoing.He always shares all kinds of his parents'housework,like doing the dishes,sweeping the floor and making dinner.He is never afraid of difficulties.He works very hard and likes reading.And he takes an active part in all kinds of sports.After school,he plays football with his teammates.And he joins the school clubs like the music club,the art club and the chess one.He learns a lot from his activities.
Xiao Hui is a good sunshine teenager.I should learn from him.
★小試牛刀
母愛情深,母愛無價。學會感恩,學會回報。某網站舉辦了以“My mother”為題的英語征文活動。請根據思維導圖提供的信息寫一篇英語短文,介紹母親和你們之間的真情故事。
具體要求:
1.短文應包括導圖中的全部信息,做到條理清楚,行文連貫,段落分明;
2.詞數不少于80,開頭已給出,但不計入總詞數。

My mother
We need love.We also need to love.The person I love most is my mother.