Looking for Chon

廣東中山市龍山中學 袁丹純

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難詞探意

1. scrape by 艱難度日

2. ramp /r?mp/ n. 斜坡；活動梯

Sometimes Mary hated living so far from work. Mary kept looking at her watch. Today the bus was already fifteen minutes late.

“Maybe I just won't go to work today,” Mary said to herself. But she knew she didn't mean it.She couldn't afford to miss work—with two children to feed. Life was so difficult that it took every penny she made just to scrape by.

That's why she and the children had moved to the country.Rents were cheaper out there. Mary watched the birds flying in the distance. She wanted to be as free as the birds in the sky. Mary sighed. It was hard to work all day at the restaurant and then come home to housework late at night. And late buses didn't make her long days any easier.

As Mary watched, one of the birds seemed to be dropping out of the sky. Only it didn't exactly look like a bird. Somehow it looked more like an airplane. Mary watched as it slowly floated toward her. As the thing came closer, Mary saw that it wasn't a plane either. It looked like a flying lizard! Mary was frozen with fear. She knew that there was no place to hide. She prayed that the thing in front of her would go away. But the ship landed right on the road in front of her. Out came a longramp.

Mary hid her face in her hands. Her whole body was shaking.Next she heard a hissing sound,like gas escaping from a pipe. Then all was quiet. Mary opened her eyes and peeked through her fingers. She couldn't believe what she saw. A woman in a gleaming silver bodysuit was standing a few feet in front of her. She carried a small box and smiled softly.

“Are you Chon?” Mary heard. “What?” Mary asked. “Are you Chon?” the question came again.Mary stared. The woman's lips had not moved! The words had just appeared in Mary's head, like thoughts. “I have a gift for Chon,” the woman said. She opened the box she was holding. Suddenly the air around her seemed to glow with yellow light.

Language

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Ⅰ. Difficult sentences

1. Life was so difficult that it took every penny she made just to scrape by.

譯文：生活太難了，她不得不靠賺來的每一分錢緊巴巴地過日子。

分析：本句中so...that...表示“如此……以至于……”的意思，有因果關系。 she made是定語從句，修飾前面的every penny.

2. Next she heard a hissing sound, like gas escaping from a pipe.

譯文：接下來她聽到嘶嘶聲，好像是管道漏氣的聲音。

分析：本句的escaping from a pipe為非謂語，修飾前面的gas。

Ⅱ. Useful sentence patterns

Expressions for emotion

1. Sometimes Mary hated living so far from work.

2. She wanted to be as free as the birds in the sky.

3. Mary sighed.

4. Mary was frozen with fear.

5. Mary hid her face in her hands.

6. Her whole body was shaking.

7. She couldn't believe what she saw.

Expressions for environment

1. Mary watched the birds flying in the distance.

2. As Mary watched, one of the birds seemed to be dropping out of the sky.

3. Somehow it looked more like an airplane.

4. Mary watched as it slowly floated toward her.

5. It looked like a flying lizard!

Ⅲ. Sentence pattern to learn

She couldn't afford to miss work—with two children to feed.

分析：“with + 名詞+ 非謂語”是一個地道的表達，能給文章增添不少色彩。

仿寫：他帶著腦子里的很多問題，跑到了數學老師的辦公室。

Reading

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閱讀上面的短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。注意：

1. 所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；

2. 續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。Paragraph 1:

It was gold!___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph 2:

“You are Chon I am looking for,” the woman said.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

寫作導引

一、分析語篇，理清要素

要想續寫內容與所給材料內容連貫、銜接緊密，必須充分了解所給材料的大意。 本文是一篇記敘文，文章分析如下：

二、閱讀續寫開頭語，展開合理想象

我們可以基于原文本和續寫段落首句提供的信息，構思要續寫的故事情節。 這一構思分為四步：

第一步，根據已給出的文本判斷文章的立意。

根據續寫第1段的首句“It was gold！ ”可知，外星人以為她是肖恩，要給她金子。 她會欺騙這個外星人嗎？ 從續寫第2段首句的You are Chon I am looking for可以看出，上一段中瑪麗一些好的行為讓外星人確認她就是值得送禮物的肖恩。 譬如，瑪麗沒有為了生活而欺騙別人，她擁有誠實的品質。 這是本文要傳遞的價值觀。

第二步，圍繞續寫第1段所給出的段首句“It was gold! ”進行提問構思：

（1）Would Mary pretend she was Chon in order to get the gold?

（2）If she did, what would happen next? Would the alien find out her lie?

（3）If she did not, what would happen next?

（4）Is there any relationship between Mary and Chon?

第三步，根據續寫第2段所給出的段首句倒推續寫第1段一定要寫什么。

分析一下第2段所給出的段首句“‘You are Chon I am looking for,’ the woman said.”可以推斷續寫第1段中瑪麗應該否認了自己是肖恩，而且她做了一些事情讓外星人肯定她是肖恩。 如此安排能確保兩段之間銜接合理，情節連貫。

第四步，圍繞續寫第2段所給出的段首句進行提問構思：

（1）How did the alien know that Mary was Chon?

（2）What would Mary do if she was given the gold and how would she feel?

（3）What would be the ending?

三、潤色成篇

在續寫的過程中要注意“續”的原則，做到主題、情節、語言風格一致。 具體如下：

（1）通過分析，本文的主題是弘揚積極正面價值觀的，如誠實，續寫時應注意結局的走向；

（2）續寫的情節應和前面的開始和發展吻合，根據人物的性格特點進行合理的預測；

（3）前文中有多處心理描寫、語言描寫和環境描寫，且用了大量的非謂語、定語從句和豐富的動詞，續寫時應關注并模仿這些語言風格；

（4）續寫時注意句型長短相間，句型豐富，語法、用詞、標點符號的準確性。