擬好文章結尾，點亮續寫主題

方莉苗

讀后續寫這一題型既綜合性地檢驗考生的語言能力，又要求其在語篇形式中展現自己的文化意識和思維品質，貼近新課標中所設定目標的“形成正確的價值觀和道德情感”。通常來說，文章的結尾、主題的升華是考生的深層次理解能力體現之處，也是其語言精煉所在。

本文以1月份八省聯考模擬題和3篇續寫高考真題為例，結合考生在寫作練筆中的具體困惑，探討如何擬好點亮續寫主題（theme）的結尾句。

[例1]?2021年1月八省聯考題

故事梗概：陌生人幫助修車后，偷偷返還作者給的報酬。

提煉主題：幫助他人。

擬好結尾：這個故事既是“助人”主題，結尾便可融入陌生家庭不計回報的幫助給作者所帶來的沖擊或者感慨，并考慮將具體事件向意義所在（句1）、人生思考（句2）、未來展望、傳遞善良（句3、句4）升華。

結尾句1：It?was?at?that?moment?that?I?realized?such?acts?of?kindness?are?opportunities?to?know?how?good?it?feels?to?be?kind?and?helpful.

結尾句2：The?family?made?me?really?moved，?and?I?finally?understood?it?is?kindness?and?help?that?make?the?world?go?around.

結尾句3：Having?learned?a?life?lesson?from?the?family，?I?made?up?my?mind?to?help?more?people?in?the?future.

結尾句4：Since?then?Ive?decided?to?help?others?more，?as?kindness?is?one?thing?that?really?deserves?to?be?passed?on?from?one?to?another.

[例2]?2020年7月新高考卷（山東）

故事梗概：孩子們用賣爆米花的方法，幫助貧困家庭解決經濟困難。

提煉主題：幫助他人。

擬好結尾：這一篇高考真題中的故事同樣是“助人”主題，也同樣是一個家庭對別人的幫助，不同的是，有想法和有行動的是一群善良而又聰明的孩子。結尾可自然融入孩子們通過幫助他人得到心靈成長，考慮把一個具體事件向獲得快樂（句1）、自身成長（句2）、領悟人生道理（句3、句4）升華。

結尾句1：All?of?this?was?because?of?Johns?bright?idea?and?the?familys?help.?For?them，?it?was?really?an?unforgettable?and?cheerful?life?experience.

結尾句2：It?turned?out?that?their?efforts?not?only?helped?a?friend?in?need，?but?also?gave?themselves?the?sweet?taste?of?helping?others.

結尾句3：It?is?love?and?helping?others?that?make?the?world?go?around?and?Bernard?felt?it?deep?in?his?little?heart.

結尾句4：Bernard?was?deeply?moved?and?thankful，?and?he?knew?from?the?bottom?of?his?heart?that?it?was?not?just?money，?but?love，?kindness?and?friendship?that?filled?his?little?pot.

[例3]?2020年7月浙江卷

故事梗概：作者和妻子在拍攝北極熊過程中遭遇攻擊，最終脫險。

提煉主題：脫離險境。

擬好結尾：在“人與自然”的主題語境下，人與動物的故事中也往往滲透著作者的情感、態度和價值觀。此類文章的結尾應以人與自然和諧相處為原則，可考慮用“畫面定格法”交代作者和妻子成功脫離險境（句1），或者“首尾呼應法”總結有驚無險，不虛此行，成功用相機拍到了夢寐以求的照片（句2），又或者將歷險記升華至人與動物的相遇聯結（句3）以及人能為動物和自然做些什么（句4）。

結尾句1：As?we?were?climbing?the?rope?ladder，?Elli?kept?praying?to?show?her?thankfulness?of?being?safe?and?sound.

結尾句2：Though?risking?my?life，?Ive?got?the?best?picture?ever?and?its?all?worth?it.

結尾句3：Although?all?our?pictures?were?lost，?our?memory?of?this?unexpected?encounter?remains?fresh?till?today.

結尾句4：Several?hours?later，?we?arrived?at?home?safe?and?sound，?but?we?realized?that?we?should?actually?do?something?to?help?the?hungry?bears.

[例4]?2020年1月浙江卷

故事梗概：寵物狗Poppy因為男孩去上大學而悶悶不樂，家人給它帶來了新伙伴。男孩回家再見到Poppy，感到激動和驚喜。

提煉主題：珍惜新朋友，適應新生活。

擬好結尾：這篇故事細膩地描寫了家人間、家人與小動物間的濃厚感情，其中還有描繪小狗與新伙伴嬉戲打鬧、小狗與主人久別重逢的溫馨場面，因此文章結尾可用“對話收尾法”解答男孩的疑問（句1），可用“畫面定格法”烘托男孩意外驚喜和欣慰的心情（句2），也可由Poppy找到新伙伴出發，描寫男孩聯想到自己應多結交新朋友，去適應大學的新環境（句3、句4），點亮主題。

結尾句1：His?parents?laughed?at?the?look?of?surprise?on?his?face.?“Its?Poppys?new?companion.”said?Mom.

結尾句2：Understanding?what?happened?immediately，?the?boy?embraced?two?little?puppies?tightly?and?smiled?with?relief.

結尾句3：Seeing?the?two?little?ones?playing?together?cheerfully，?the?boy?thought?about?himself，“I?should?also?learn?to?get?along?better?with?others?and?adapt?to?living?in?my?university.”

結尾句4：This?reminded?the?boy?of?his?college?life，?and?he?suddenly?realized?that?it?is?also?important?for?him?to?make?new?friends?and?adapt?to?the?new?environment.

[結尾實用素材]

詞匯表達積累：moved;?thankful;?grateful;?thrilling;?unforgettable;?cheerfully;?excitedly;?finally;?safe?and?sound;?keep/bear?sth.?in?mind;?memory;?encounter;?life?experience;?hold?the?firm?belief?that?...;?sth.?had?taught?sb.?a?life?lesson;?not?only...，?but?also...;?it?is?...?that?...;?it?is?...?for?sb.?to?do?...;?sb.?suddenly?realized?that?...;?Suddenly?it?dawned?on?sb.?that?...

主題好句背誦：

It?is?love/kindness?that?makes?the?world?go?around.

Even?small?acts?of?love/kindness?can?make?a?big?difference.

In?no?case?will?we?give?up?the?concern?and?love?for?our?families/children.

Where?there?is?great?love，?there?are?always?miracles.

Love/Kindness?is?one?thing?that?really?deserves?to?be?passed?on?from?one?to?another.

The?special?trip?was?deeply?engraved?in?my?mind.

Never?had?I?had?such?a?thrilling?yet?dangerous?experience/vacation?before.

The?thrilling?experience/vacation?will?never?fade?from?my?mind.

Even?today，?I?still?regard?this?experience?as?treasured?memory.

The?memory?of?this?unexpected?encounter?remains?fresh?till?today.

真正寫好結尾句，需要對故事主題進行深層挖掘和點亮，再加詞匯表達的厚積薄發與高分好句的亮麗出場，便能為讀后續寫錦上添花。

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