無規矩不成方圓。遵守規則,方顯和諧。初中三年的校園生活,遵守規則的你一定有不少成長和變化。請以“School Rules Make Me Better”為題,并根據以下要點和要求,用英語寫一篇短文,描述規則給你帶來的變化和成長。
要點:(1)你的學校有哪些校規;(2)遵守校規給你帶來了哪些方面的變化和成長;(3)向你的同學們發出倡議,呼吁大家遵守校規。
要求:(1)文中不要出現真實校名和師生姓名;(2)詞數 100 左右。
1. 審主題、審文體。主題內容是描寫校園規則給自己帶來的成長變化。初中階段有不少校規,在描述時注意條理清晰。文體為說明文或議論文。
2. 審要點。寫作內容需要涵蓋題目中的三個要點,即學校有哪些校規,這些校規給你帶來了哪些方面的成長,倡議同學們遵守校規。要點要全面,可以適當增加細節,使文章內容更豐富。
3. 審時態、審人稱。根據要點,文章應以第一人稱為主。介紹校規時,應使用一般現在時;描述校規對自己成長的正面影響時,可使用一般現在時或現在完成時;發出倡議時, 可使用一般現在時或根據情況使用一般將來時。
School Rules Make Me Better
It is widely believed that nothing can be accomplished without norms or standards.(開篇用主語從句引出話題, 主題明確。)As students, we have to obey our school rules consciously for the purpose of self-improvement.
Our school rules which I followed every day during the past three years have made me better than before.(巧用“which”引導的定語從句和比較級,來說明遵守校規讓“我”得到成長。)
First, I have to read English in a loud voice in order to master the words and grammar well. Second, we are not allowed to cut in line or talk loudly during the lunchtime. What’s more, we have to do our homework carefully and hand in it on time.
Following these rules not only helps me develop good learning habits but also enables me to study more efficiently.(以動名詞短語作主語,以“not only...but also...”表并列,是本文的一大亮點。) Last but not least, I realize the importance of self-discipline. I hope every student can become better by following school rules.
點 評
文章要點齊全,條理非常清晰,好詞好句頗多,如“accomplished” “consciously”“self-improvement” “efficiently”等,可見作者扎實的語言功底;句式靈活多樣,使用了主語從句、定語從句、動名詞短語作主語;“first” “second” “what’s more”“last but not least”等表層次的詞語的使用,使文章顯得脈絡清晰、流暢自然。
School Rules Make Me Better
As we all know, each school has its specific school rules. Our school rules which make me a better person are as follows.(“which”引導的定語從句修飾“rules”,既點題又承上啟下,自然引出下文。)
First, we can’t arrive late for class, and can’t talk loudly in class. Second, we have to keep our classroom clean.What’s more, we must read books when we’re waiting at the dining room. These rules make it possible for me to be more independent and get better grades than before.(“make it possible for sb. to do sth.”意為“使做某事對于某人來說成為可能”,表達準確貼切。)
As the saying goes, if people don’t make the rules, our society will be in chaos. If there are no rules restrict students’behavior, our school will be in a mess. Although some school rules are very strict, it’s necessary for students to follow them. Thus, I think all of us should obey the school rules. Only in this way can we achieve our goals and make great progress as well.( 此處是向同學們發出倡議, 呼吁同學們遵守校規。結尾句運用“only+ 狀語或狀語從句放句首,句子半倒裝”的結構,再次加強語氣,升華主旨。)
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文章結構清晰:第一段開篇點題,引出下文;第二段描述校規及其給自己帶來的成長;最后一段發出倡議。要點齊全,銜接流暢。在表達方面,描述規則時運用了“We can’t... ”“We have to...” “We must...” “It’s necessary for us to do...”的句型。在論證規則合理性時運用了“as the saying goes”、“ if ”引導的條件從句、“although”引導的讓步狀語從句,收尾時運用了倒裝句,在行文時運用了“first”“second”“what’s more”“thus”等邏輯連接詞。寫作技巧嫻熟,值得肯定。
(選自《中考英語熱點作文沖刺》,文心出版社,2023年8月第1版,有改動)