《考試說明》書面表達評分標準中最高檔次的要求為:覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點,應用了較高級的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯,有效地使用了語句間的連接成分,使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。
這幾句話不僅涵蓋了評分的標準和依據(jù),更重要的是為我們進行書面表達指明了方向,提供了思路,發(fā)揮了指導棒的功能。
審題是寫好文章的第一步,審題時要注意把握好三個方面,即文體、人稱、時態(tài)。書面表達常見的幾種文體是記敘文、說明文、議論文。
一、多樣化句式的寫作效果
為了使文章生動活潑,除了用主語開頭外,還可以用句子的其他成分開頭。
1.用副詞開頭:Too often,students fall into the habit of cheating on tests.
Regretfully, the woman driver didn’t stop but fled as quickly as possible.
2.用同位語開頭:Air, water and oxygen,everything is necessary for life.
3.用狀語開頭:Dark and empty, the house looked very different from the way I remembered it.
4.用表語開頭:Equally important to the highest success in learning a language are intense interest plus persistent effort.
5.用賓語開頭:My advice you would not listen to; my helps you laughed at. Now you will have what you asked for.
6.用介詞短語開頭:To me the news was very interesting, but to my wife very boring.
In front of the school is the newly-built building.
二、常用的一些關聯(lián)詞
1.時間:now thenbefore/after/later/soon/first/next meanwhile/finally/at last/in the end
2.因果:because/since/so/as a result/therefore/thusbecause of this/for this reason/in that case
3.附加遞進 also and/then/in addition/furthermore/moreover/what’s more
4.比較:like/unlike/similarly/just as/in the same way
5.對照:but/still/however/otherwise/nevertheless/ on the other hand/on the contrary
6.讓步:dispite/in spite of/though/even though/no matter how/ what/when
7.目的:for this purpose/so that/in order that
8.列舉解釋:for example/such as/in other words
9.總結(jié):in a word/in summary/in conclusion/in short in brief/that is/from above
三、書面表達訓練點評
寫作要求:
簡要介紹學校布局,校園中間是教學樓,兩旁分別為體育館和圖書館,操場在街對面。適當發(fā)揮,不少于70詞。
學生習作:
Dear friend, (1)
I’m writing to tell you something about my school. Now I stand on the road leading to the school gate.(2) In front of me stands our teaching building, every day we happily study altogether. On my left, there exists a gym. In it, you can do some exercises on the PE equipment. On my right stands the library with many books, and it was there that students can read a lot freely. The playgroud is across the street, where we can have PE classes.
糾錯診所:
(1)文章的開頭和第一句話用了書信格式, 說明沒有認真審題, 這種失誤是寫作之大忌。
(2)在這篇文章中作者的寫作思路很清晰,使自己立足于通向?qū)W校門口的大路上,然后介紹學校的布局。但是 “我” 在文章中應該是隱形的,即讀者能夠從文章中看出作者的立足點。所以這句話純屬畫蛇添足。
教師點評:
這是一篇說明文。習作者能夠按照寫作要求對學校進行簡要介紹,要點齊全,以空間方位順序清楚合理地概括了學校的布局,遣詞造句均能達意,并較好地使用了一些較高級詞匯和結(jié)構(gòu)如倒裝句、強調(diào)句等,整體來看是一篇不錯的文章。從出錯的地方看,習作者有點粗心大意,沒有認真細致地審題,想當然地寫成了書信格式。而且,說明文要求能夠客觀地描述某一事物,所以作者不應把自己置身其中。
參考范文:
Our school is very beautiful,now let me introuduce it to you.
In front of the road stands the teaching building, every day we happily study altogether. On the left,there exists a gym, in it we can do some exercises on the PE equipment. On the right stands the library with many books, and it was there that students can read a lot freely. The playground is across the street, where we can have PE classes.