凸顯表達(dá)的新穎性，提高文章的檔次

文章的新穎性是指一篇文章超越了傳統(tǒng)和常規(guī)具有與眾不同的特征。在考試中，平淡的作文得分肯定不高；新穎的文章會給人以好感，從而得到同檔次中最高的分?jǐn)?shù)。

一、新穎性的具體體現(xiàn)

為體現(xiàn)文章的新穎性，我們要從新穎的詞、句型和文章的內(nèi)涵、立意上下功夫。

1. 用新穎的動詞。

使用新穎的動詞會使表達(dá)更為生動、形象。如：

（1）Nowadays， there are many newly-built buildings in my hometown. 可改為：Nowadays， many newly-built buildings have mushroomed in my hometown.

（2）At present， plenty of poor quality products appear on the market. 可改為：At present， poor quality products flood on the market.

（3）There was a terrible earthquake in Wenchuan of Sichuan Province on May 12th， 2008. 可改為：A terrible earthquake hit Wenchuan of Sichuan Province on May 12th， 2008.

2. 用新穎的副詞。

使用某些短語或句型相應(yīng)的副詞。如：

（1） There is no doubt that computers play an important role in our daily life. 可改為：Undoubtedly， computers play an important role in our daily life.

（2） Doing sports can get us relaxed. In addition， it can build up our body.可改為：Doing sports can get us relaxed. Additionally， it can build up our body.

3. 用新穎的形容詞。

運(yùn)用新穎的形容詞，表達(dá)更高級。如：

（1）Nowadays， more and more Chinese people study abroad. 可改為：Nowadays， the increasing number of Chinese people study abroad.

（2）As the competition is increasingly fierce， many students are under great pressure. 可改為：As the competition is increasingly severe， numerous students are under high academic pressure.

4. 用新穎的名詞。

用更高級的名詞凸顯表達(dá)的新穎性。如：

（1） Most people approve of the idea that...可改為：The majority of the people approve of the idea that...

（2） Senior 3 students make great efforts to improve their study. 可改為：Senior 3 students make great efforts to improve their academic performance.

5. 用新穎的介詞。

使用恰當(dāng)?shù)慕樵~短語可使文章的語言更加簡潔。如：

（1）It’s hard for me to describe the joy with words. 可改為：My joy is beyond words.

（2）If we don’t have passion for English， we will easily lose heart when we are faced with difficulty. 可改為：Without passion for English， we will easily lose heart when we are faced with difficulty.

6. 利用詞性轉(zhuǎn)換。

有時利用詞性轉(zhuǎn)換，會更能抓住讀者的眼球，留下更深刻的印象。如：

（1） The newly-built Science and Technology Museum is the symbol of the local culture. 可改為：The newly-built Science and Technology Museum symbolizes the local culture.

（2）Mary respects her parents very much. 可改為：Mary shows great respect for his parents.

（3）I hope that all the citizens are involved in the campaign. 可改為：I express my hope that all the citizens are involved in the campaign.

（4）The expert suggests that the authority should take some effective measures to protect the environment. 可改為：The expert puts forward the suggestion that the authority should take some effective measures to protect the environment.

7. 用新穎的短語。

用新穎的短語代替相應(yīng)的單詞或短語，表達(dá)更高級，更有感染力。如：

（1）The influence of a good teacher is important. 可改為：The influence of a good teacher is of great significance.

（2）Parents pay great attention to their children’s education. 可改為：Parents attach great importance to their children’s education.

8. 用新穎的句型。

用強(qiáng)調(diào)句和倒裝句增強(qiáng)文章的氣勢和感染力。如：

（1） It is very difficult for me to learn English， 可改為：I have great difficulty in learning English.

（2） With Mr Chen’s unselfish help， I made significant progress in English. 可改為：It was with Mr Chen’s unselfish help that I made significant progress in English.

（3）People realized the importance of education when they failed to find jobs due to the lack of diploma. 可改為：Only when they failed to find jobs due to the lack of diploma did people realize the importance of education.

9. 用新穎從句。

同位語從句和主語從句是學(xué)生少用的從句，使用這兩種從句會顯新穎性。如：

（1）He believes that one is never too old to challenge himself. 可改為：He holds the belief that one is never too old to challenge himself.

（2）People hope that the government should make laws to guarantee the animals’ rights. 可改為：It is hoped that the government should make laws to guarantee the animals’ rights.

10. 用增加文章內(nèi)涵的表達(dá)。

比喻句和諺語增加文章的內(nèi)涵，提高文章的深度和高度。如：

（1）When we experience the life we will know what it really means. 可改為：Life is just like a box of chocolate， and we won’t know what’s in the box until we open it.

（2）A good teacher teaches us knowledge and truth of life. 可改為：A good teacher is just like a valuable book， from which we can obtain knowledge and truth of life.

（3）...I failed many times， but I didn’t lose heart and eventually realized my dream. As the saying goes， “Failure is the mother of success.”

11. 用含蓄取代直白。

用一些含蓄的詞表達(dá)更有意境。如：

We offer hot water 24 hours every day and the swimming pool is free to use any time.

可改為：Hot water is available 24 hours every day in our hotel and you can have free access to the swimming pool any time you want.

二、新穎性在英語寫作中的運(yùn)用

高三學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)緊張，考試壓力大，因此，做一些戶外運(yùn)動來放松是很有必要的。但有的學(xué)生反對，有的學(xué)生贊同。請你以“Study and Relaxation”為題，根據(jù)下表內(nèi)容寫一篇5句話的短文。

一般習(xí)作：

Study and Relaxation

Most students say that taking sports for relaxation just wastes time because for senior three students， every minute is important and valuable. In addition， at school， there are so many subjects to learn and so much homework to do that there is no time for students to take outside sports. However， some students think that sports are necessary as studying all day long without rest is not good and does harm to our health. Taking some exercises after class can reduce the pressure of taking examinations. Personally， we should make a balance between sports and study.

新穎習(xí)作：

Study and Relaxation

①The majority of students hold the view that taking sports is just a waste of time because for senior three students， every minute counts. ②Additionally， at school， there are so many subjects to learn and so countless homework to do that there is no time available， especially for senior three students to take outside sports. ③However， some students utter a sonorous voice that sports are essential to them as it’s known that focusing on study all day long without any relaxation is not effective and does harm to our health physically and mentally as well. ④On the contary， setting aside some time for exercises after class can relieve the pressure of taking examinations. ⑤As a whole， As an old saying goes， “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.”， therefore， only by making a balance between sports and study can we benefit a lot from it.

分析：

1. 運(yùn)用了新穎動詞：在①和④句count， relieve

2. 運(yùn)用了新穎副詞：在②句additionally

3. 運(yùn)用了新穎形容詞詞：在③句essential， effective

4. 運(yùn)用了新穎名詞：在①和③句majority， relaxation

5. 運(yùn)用了新穎短語：在①和④句a waste of， set aside

6. 運(yùn)用了含蓄表達(dá)：在②句there is no time available

7. 運(yùn)用了新穎從句：在①和③句hold the view that...utter a sonorous voice that...

8. 運(yùn)用了新穎句式：在⑤句only by making a balance ... can we...

9. 運(yùn)用了增加文章內(nèi)涵和立意的表達(dá)：在⑤句As an old saying goes， “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.”

總之，新穎性應(yīng)貫穿文章的始終。作者應(yīng)在詞、句和篇三方面去包裝一篇文章，只有這樣，才能讓讀者，特別是評卷老師感到眼前一亮，從而使文章得到名副其實的好評和高分。

（作者單位：肇慶市廣寧縣第一中學(xué)）

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