在“讀寫(xiě)任務(wù)”寫(xiě)作中如何做到要點(diǎn)齊全

在讀寫(xiě)任務(wù)中，“發(fā)表自己看法”占據(jù)了大部分的內(nèi)容，它是考生能否在寫(xiě)作中拿到高分的關(guān)鍵。為保證要點(diǎn)齊全，考生可以按照給出的要點(diǎn)順序進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作，每個(gè)要點(diǎn)一段話，且每段保證有主題句，并將主題句放在段首，然后圍繞主題句進(jìn)行闡述。

[實(shí)例分析]

2010年深圳市第一次模擬考試的“讀寫(xiě)任務(wù)”的[寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容]2為:

2. 然后以約120個(gè)詞就“節(jié)約資源，愛(ài)我校園 Save Resources and Love Our School”的主題發(fā)表你的看法，內(nèi)容包括:

(1)您認(rèn)為校園里存在哪些浪費(fèi)的現(xiàn)象;

(2)談?wù)勥@些浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象帶來(lái)的危害;

(3)建設(shè)“國(guó)際生態(tài)學(xué)校”，您該做點(diǎn)什么?

[解題指導(dǎo)]

1. 明確任務(wù):寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容中的第二個(gè)部分細(xì)分了三個(gè)小任務(wù)。考生要先看清楚每個(gè)小任務(wù)的具體要求，才可以杜絕因?yàn)榇中穆?xiě)要點(diǎn)后造成不必要的失分。

2. 謀篇布局:按照[寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容]，考生的作文除了題目和概括外，剩下的文段就要包括以下三點(diǎn):(1)列舉出校園里存在的浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象;(2)談?wù)勥@些浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象帶來(lái)的危害;(3)為了建設(shè)“國(guó)際生態(tài)學(xué)校”，你該做的事情。考生可以將這三個(gè)要點(diǎn)依次分成三段話來(lái)寫(xiě)，且盡可能將每段的主題句放在段首。

3. 檢查與潤(rùn)色:檢查文章是否有時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤，單詞拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，詞性錯(cuò)誤和句子結(jié)構(gòu)錯(cuò)誤;再讀讀文章語(yǔ)言是否流暢，關(guān)連詞和過(guò)渡句是否用得恰當(dāng)，語(yǔ)言是否精練;盡量用一些較高級(jí)的短語(yǔ)和句型來(lái)代替文章中比較平淡的詞和句子，以達(dá)到為文章增色的目的。

[參考范文]

However， the wasting phenomenon can be easily found everywhere in our school. Very often we come across an empty classroom with lights still on. Besides， it’s not difficult to find evidence of wasting water. Additionally， some throw away the soft drink bottles， used exercise papers and books， which should be recycled. Worse still， others use non-environmental lunch boxes， causing “White Pollution”.

These phenomena show that many students lack the sense of environmental awareness， which is dangerous. There is no deny that if these wasting phenomenon continue， we will be driven to the edge of lack of not only energy but also everything we need for our daily life.

To build an Eco-school， to start with， I am supposed to be more environmentally friendly. What’s more， I can start from doing some small things， such as collecting used items for recycling， turning off the lights， or saving water. In conclusion， I will always remember my responsibility， and bear in my mind that every little counts.

總之，在讀寫(xiě)任務(wù)寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中，考生要注意以下幾點(diǎn):

1. 若要求寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不要遺漏，且標(biāo)題、主體和觀點(diǎn)的中心要一致;

2. 嚴(yán)格按照題目的提示構(gòu)思和寫(xiě)作，并依照要點(diǎn)提示分段論述，千萬(wàn)不能將幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)都寫(xiě)在一段話中;

3. 主體部分要開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山，每個(gè)段落一定要有主題句，且將其放在段首，這樣才能讓文章結(jié)構(gòu)更加清晰;

4. 安排好版面，書(shū)寫(xiě)端正、卷面整潔，不要超出答題區(qū)域。

[原創(chuàng)練習(xí)]

以約120個(gè)詞發(fā)表你的看法，內(nèi)容包括:

(1)有毒蔬菜對(duì)消費(fèi)者和經(jīng)銷(xiāo)商的危害;

(2) 我們應(yīng)該采取什么措施來(lái)阻止有毒蔬菜的種植與銷(xiāo)售，保障蔬菜食用的安全。

[解題指導(dǎo)]

1. 明確任務(wù)，寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容中的第二個(gè)部分細(xì)分了兩個(gè)小任務(wù)。但要注意的是第一個(gè)小任務(wù)中需要分別闡述有毒蔬菜對(duì)消費(fèi)者的危害與對(duì)經(jīng)銷(xiāo)商的危害。遺漏任何一個(gè)小要點(diǎn)，都會(huì)造成不必要的失分。

2. 謀篇布局:整理寫(xiě)作思路，確定文章的框架。按照[寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容]部分的要求來(lái)看，考生的作文除了題目和概括外，剩下的文段就要包括以下兩點(diǎn):(1)列舉出有毒蔬菜對(duì)消費(fèi)者的危害與對(duì)經(jīng)銷(xiāo)商的危害;(2)為了阻止有毒蔬菜的種植與銷(xiāo)售，保障蔬菜食用的安全，我們應(yīng)該采取的措施。我們可以依次將兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)寫(xiě)成兩段話。

[參考范文] (One possible version)

The contaminated vegetables have endangered greatly the health of the consumers and the reputation of the sellers. On one hand， the contaminated vegetables can cause physical discomfort or even deaths to the consumers after they eat those vegetables. On the other hand， this may also cause great losses to the sellers， and they may even lose their regular consumers permanently from then on.

Therefore， in my opinion， some effective measures must be taken promptly to prevent planting and selling the contaminated vegetables to ensure the safety of eating the vegetables. To start with， laws should be made and carried out to put an end to the planting of these vegetables， and to punish the farmers and sellers who grow and sell these contaminated vegetables severely. Furthermore， the administration and supervision on vegetables should be strengthened immediately. Last but not least， we should do our utmost to raise people’s awareness of getting to know more about the healthy vegetables and informing against planting and selling contaminated vegetables.

責(zé)任編校蔣小青