My Father
My father is a farmer.He is now forty five years old.Because of years of hard work,he looks old①than his age.
When I was young,he is used to②tell me the importance of study.Father knows little about English and other subjects,but he usually gives me some good advice on how to learn my lessons good③.He is not only kind to me but also very strict with me.With his help,I have made great progress.
I will never to④forget what he taught me.I think my father is the best father in the world.
河北省阜城縣古城中學九年級(1)班 李東雷
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苗春喜 女,中學英語一級教師,衡水市優秀教師;多年來在省級以上報刊《人民教師論壇》《科海故事博覽》等刊物上發表多篇論文并獲獎;曾在第四屆全國中小學生素質教育英語知識能力競賽中榮獲優秀輔導教師獎。
1.優點:
本文主題鮮明,段落層次清楚。先寫了父親的外貌形象,然后重點寫了父親對我的學習的影響,字里行間流露出對父親的敬愛之情。小作者巧妙地運用了多個時態,使用了大量短語。尤其是文章句式結構的多變體現了作者不凡的語言功底。
2.需要修改的地方:
①old改為older。因其后有表示比較的than,old應使用其比較級。
②去掉is。比較:used to do意為“過去經常做……”,be used to do意為“被用于……”。
③good改為well。修飾動詞要用副詞,不用形容詞。
④去掉to。因助動詞will后要接動詞原形,不能接不定式。
3.評分:
按中考英語作文滿分20分的標準,本文修改前可得18分。