Writing wildlife protection

摘 要：Get the students to pay more attention to environmental protection.這篇書面表達是以漫畫為材料的半開放式作文，只給出了中文的題目：“師傅被熏暈了”。通過觀察不難發現漫畫中師徒四人都表情痛苦，究其根源都是因為河水太黑太臟的緣故。

關鍵詞：作文；漫畫；討論

中圖分類號：G632 文獻標識碼：B 文章編號：1002-7661（2013）16-260-01

Teaching aims

Get the students to pay more attention to environmental protection.

Get the students to talk and write something about the environmental protection.

Teaching difficult points

To help students figure out the structures and main points of the passage.

To organize the passage properly.

這篇書面表達是以漫畫為材料的半開放式作文，只給出了中文的題目：“師傅被熏暈了”。通過觀察不難發現漫畫中師徒四人都表情痛苦，究其根源都是因為河水太黑太臟的緣故。在平時的訓練中，學生已經對書面表達中出現的熱點問題有一定的熟悉和了解，所以很容易就能抓住本文的要點：環保問題。如果按照三段式作文來書寫，三段的具體內容是什么。本節課采取小組合作模式，經過兩輪有效討論得出最終需要的內容。

Teaching procures

Step1Observe the picture and discuss the structure of the passage with the group members（確立文章的“點”）

一、What happened？

二、Reasons

三、Consequences

四、Measures

這四個關鍵信息的確立非常重要，首先第一段要交代發生什么事情了，要對整個事情有一個初步的描述。接下來按照就要討論為什么會出現這樣的現象以及這樣的情況會帶來什么結果及影響。最后針對此種現象作為參與者應該怎么做，對全文起總結作用。

Step2 Discuss some specific and detailed information （確立文章的線）

第一輪討論確立了寫作框架，接下來就要確立寫作的詳細信息，及文章的“線”。文章的四個要點非常清晰，第一個描述漫畫信息，一句話就可以完成。所以文章的重點重心就在第二大段落上面。第二輪學生討論的重點是這種現象產生的具體原因是什么以及會產生什么樣的后果。學這輪討論大概需要10分鐘，討論結束之后，請同學上黑板來板書詳細的討論結果，以供同學們后面寫作時參考。下面試列舉一些學生討論的結果：

Reasons

一、Some factories built near the water pour dirty and waste water into the river

二、Some people throw rubbish into the river

三、The government turns a blind eye on the pollution

…

Consequences

四、Fish and some other creatures in the river would die because of the water pollution

五、People who live near the river would be sick

六、The plants grown by the river would be affected

七、It would cause air pollution

…

Step3 Organize the main points and uses the proper words to make the passage natural and fluent. （確定文章的“面”）

有了討論結果，學生就可以根據自己的觀點和供參考的信息合理組織自己的文章，值得強調的是，不能只是將這些要點連起來，學生要使用恰當的過渡詞和過渡句將文章按照合理的裸機關系組織起來，這樣的文章才會結構合理。

One possible version

One day Sun Waking together with his master and brothers was walking across a river. Suddenly his master fell off the horse by the bad smell of river water. They found the water so dirty that they could hardly breathe.

A lot of factories along the river always poured their waste water and rubbish straight into the river which made the river water polluted. In this way most of the fish in the river were killed. If the river water all over the country is polluted like this， no living things will exist in the water. Now more and more people have come to realize how serious this problem is. Our government is doing her best to take measures to fight against pollution. We expect that the water in every river will be made cleaner and cleaner before long.