袁曉英
【摘要】新推出的一年兩考浙江高考英語試卷引進概要寫作新題型。這對浙江師生來說是一個全新的挑戰?;谳敵鲵寗蛹僭O,結合一線教學實際,筆者分析出學生在概要寫作中所存在的問題,結合語篇實例,指明教師在教學中該如何按策略逐步提高學生在這方面的寫作能力。
【關鍵詞】高考英語 概要寫作 存在問題 策略培養
一、引言
自2016年10月份起,浙江省作為高考改革試點省份,英語實行一年兩考。與之前自主命題相比,試卷的內容結構發生了重大變化。寫作部分引進新題型——讀后續寫或概要寫作?!犊荚囌f明》上明確表示“兩種形式在不同考次不定期交替使用”。概要寫作原為大學英語的范疇,高中階段的概要寫作為歷史新創。學生在這一陌生題型上存在諸多問題,筆者將以一篇文本為例,提供一些教學上的策略建議。
2015年出的《考試說明》對概要寫作的要求是:提供一篇350詞以內的短文,要求考生基于該短文寫出一篇60詞左右的內容概要。閱卷時將主要考慮以下內容:(1)對原文要點的理解和呈現情況;(2)應用語法結構和詞匯的準確性;(3)上下文的連貫性;(4)對各要點表達的獨立性情況。可見,該題型考察的主要是學生對所給文本的主旨大意的把握能力,能夠找準主題句和關鍵詞,把握篇章結構,并能運用準確而簡潔的語言概括文章,使用一定的語法結構和連接詞,使文章變得通順而流暢。
二、理論依據
輸入和輸出是語言習得中不可分割的兩個部分,二者相輔相成。立于理解基礎上的輸入為后續輸出的必要條件,而輸出則是輸入的內容經過內化后自然完成的語言習得的過程。輸出的訓練是為了促進輸入的語言得到不停的強化和內化,因此將輸入(閱讀)和輸出(寫作)結合在一起,也就是新的概要寫作題型,既強調了信息的輸入,也強調了對輸入信息的重新選擇、組織語言、和銜接運用。輸出驅動的假設認為輸出比輸入對語言的能力發展驅動力更強,以輸出為導向的閱讀會更有效地帶動學生對語言體系的注意和加工,提高語言輸入的有效性。概要寫作這一目的指向性明確的語言輸出,會讓學生在閱讀的時候更加積極有效地調動思維能力,分析能力和解決問題的能力,強化語言輸入的內化遷移作用。
三、學生存在的問題
1.主旨把握不清。基于學生的字詞積累不夠,對文本的理解存在一定的偏差,不能準確地把握住主題句和關鍵詞。要明確主題句所在的位置,通常為每段的句首,句中或句末。但也有些段落沒有出現明顯的主題句,學生必需要有尋找主題句但又不全然依賴主題句的意識,這時候就需要定位關鍵詞。關鍵詞往往以實詞為主,教師要引導學生多定位動詞、名詞、形容詞為主的關鍵詞塊,為擴詞成句做好準備。
2.框架結構不明。概要寫作的文本體裁決定了文本框架,文本體裁一般為記敘文,議論文,說明文三類。記敘文的文本結構特征決定了只要我們把握住了它的六要素,who+what+when+where+why+how,再在末尾加上感悟或啟示就是一篇完整的語篇。議論文的文本結構特征為:opinion+supporting evidence+conclusion.說明文的結構特征為:a problem+causes+solution或者是a phenomenon+causes+effects甚或是an object+characteristics/function+ significance.有了整體的一個框架結構,文章的脈絡就會變得比較清晰。
3.語言不夠精簡。由于以往的高考寫作任務為寫一篇120-150詞的作文,為了文章有內容句式有變化,教師指導學生可勁地把句式拓展。但是概要寫作則側重在用自己的語言概括主旨,字數必須控制在60字以內,文本要點一般為四個左右,也就意味著每個要點的字數控制在10幾個左右。既要少又要好,成了學生的一大難題。學生往往還保持著原來的慣性思維,較多地運用各種語法句式結構,也不會運用恰當的句內連接手段,來縮短句子長度,導致語篇過長。
4.原句照搬照抄。很多學生因為對概要寫作其中要求之一要用自己的語言來表述各要點執行力不夠,或者因為做題時間上的倉促,語言積累不足,不懂靈活地運用同義替換,仍處于最初階段的找準主題句,直接照抄的省力方式。這就需要教師平時加強練習的強度,及時評價反饋,更正學生的意識思維模式。
四、教師的教學策略
教師作為學生學習上的指導者,在新題型的背景下,需要及時吃透題型要求,把握題型特點,并相應地在教學上教授一定的策略,讓學生能夠適應新題型,提高得分率。下面以下文為例,談談概要寫作的三步法:
Many of us invest valuable time, energy and money planning our vacations. We do this because we know for sure that going on vacations must be good for us. Research proves this feeling without a doubt. Vacations help us perform better at work, improve our sleep quality and cushion us against depression.
Yet, despite these benefits, many of us return home with a feeling that our last vacation was OK — but not great. In order to change this, some mistakes should be avoided. A typical one for vacation planners is attempting to maximize value for money by planning trips that have too many things. Perhaps youre planning a trip to Europe, seven cities in 10 days, and you realize it will cost only a little more to add two more destinations to the list. Sounds fine in theory, but hopping from one place to the next hardly gives an opportunity to experience what psychologists call mindfulness — time to take in our new surroundings, time to be present and absorb our travel experiences. Another mistake is that we worry too much about strategic issues such as how to find a good flight deal, how to get from A to B, or which destinations to add or subtract from our journey. These issues may seem important, but our psychological state of mind is far more important.
Actually, vacation happiness is based on the following top rules. First, choose your travel companions wisely, because nothing contributes more significantly to a trip than the right companions. Second, dont spend your vacation time in a place where everything is too expensive so as to maintain a positive mood. Third, shop wisely, for meaningful experiences provide more long-term happiness than physical possessions.
1.確定框架,找準主題句或實詞關鍵詞。這篇文章的整體框架為總分結構。第二段和第三段又各自有個小總分。
主題句可位于句首如第三段的第一句,也可位于句中,如第一段。也可以是需要自己整合的如第二段。注意:Tips1:找總領性的而不是過于詳細的句子做主題句。例如第一段的主題句應該為going on vacations must be good for us. 而不是最后一句vacation的具體好處。Tip 2: 注意連詞和代詞的作用。我們不難從Yet, despite, this 這三個詞中看出第二段的主題句應為this 所指代的第一句的后半句和第二句的整合。but 的存在讓我們從ok和not great當中有了選擇傾向。另外,從A typical one 和 Another mistake is 中概括出了兩個分。Tip 3: 補充的信息,如目的,舉例,理由不能做主題句。第三段的because, so as to,for后面的信息就應刪除。
從找實詞關鍵詞的策略來看,attempting to maximize value和worry too much about strategic issues也是為第二段的重點信息。第三段的關鍵詞為:choose your travel companions,dont spend your vacation time in a place, shop wisely.
2.對提煉出來的文章進行改寫和化繁為簡。改寫遵循兩個原則,一是同義替換,二是句式變換。這篇文本經過主題句關鍵詞處理后變為:Vacations are good for us. Many of us return home with a feeling that our last vacation was not great. In order to change this, two mistakes should be avoided. One mistake is that planners are attempting to maximize value for money. Another mistake is that we worry too much about strategic issues. Vacation happiness is based on the top rules. Choose the companions, never spend time in a place where everything is too expensive, and shop wisely. 把劃線詞進行同義替換,斜體詞進行句式變換后,再進一步的縮略簡化后則變成:Vacations benefit everyone, many people come back from vacations not feeling very great. To make our vacations happy, we should avoid two mistakes. One mistake is planners are trying to achieve the fullest value for what we invest into vacations. Another mistake is worrying too much about vacation arrangements. We should follow some rules. Choose the right companions and destinations and shop wisely.
3.用上連接詞使行文流暢。連接詞使得句于句之間,要點與要點之間的銜接過渡更加自然,語篇的連貫性更強。常用的連接詞為表轉折的如however, on the contrary,although等,表因果的如as a result/consequence, therefore,due to/owing to 等,表遞進的如whats more, whats worse, besides, in addition, not only…but also等,表總結的如in brief, to sum up, in conclusion 等。以及一些副詞如unfortunately, hopefully, surprisingly等。上文加上連接詞后最終可變為:Vacations benefit everyone, but many people come back from vacations not feeling very great. To make our vacations happy, we should avoid two mistakes — trying to achieve the fullest value for what we invest into vacations and worrying too much about vacation arrangements. Besides, we should follow some rules such as choosing the right companions and destinations and being wise in doing shopping. (63 words)
五、結語
概要寫作在目前高中教學中仍處于摸索的階段,既要求學生有一定的閱讀理解能力,又要求能對原文進行重新歸納,展現出綜合運用語言的能力,這種有挑戰性的題型需要廣大一線教師積極實踐,重視學生在解題過程中所產生的問題,加以指正更改,通過不斷地強化訓練最終提升學生的寫作產出水平。
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